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IELTS Writing Test 2 Topic: Some people say job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that having a permanent job is better than enjoying the job. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Everyone has to work. The question is: which one is more important from job security and job satisfaction. Some people think job security is more important, and the others think the opposite. In my opinion, both of them are important. Everybody needs job security. If we can have a job which we will never lose it, we will make a lot of money. Then we can buy big houses and expensive cars. We can have a perfect marriage. Also if we have this kind of job, we will not worry about losing our jobs. It’s easier to be joyful and relaxing. We do not have to take time to find jobs. In the meantime, we can have more time to get together with our family and friends. However, it is also important to have job satisfaction. If we have an interesting job, we can do our job better. We can have a strong sense of achievement from our job and even achieve success. If we are not interested our job, no matter how stable our job is, we can never succeed. Take one of my friend Jack for instance, he is a common employee in a big Internet company. He is not really interested in his job. As a result, he just wants to play video games after work. In conclusion, I think it is the best to have both of job security and job satisfaction. Because this kind of job helps us have a wonderful life. I wish we could all have such kind of job.

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Thank you for your advice. I thought there would be no one to response me here. I need to more practice because an essay which is more than 250 words is kind of hard for me.
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you've got pretty good flow happening here and your pretty good sentence structure. which is cool. But you over simplified the logic here. never losing a job = make lots of money = big houses + expensive cars + perfect marriage. We can have a strong sense of achievement from our job and even achieve success = If we are not interested our job, no matter how stable our job is, we can never succeed. < these two sentences are essentially the same. also consider using more academic words

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