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IELTS Writing Test 3 Topic: Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age? In the past, children go to school when they are about six or seven years old. However, it is more likely now parents both work, so they do not have enough time to take care their children. Instead, children can only go to school when are much younger. Some people think it is not beneficial for children. Especially the traditional points, they are afraid that children will not close to their parents, or children will lose their wonderful childhood. In my view, there are actually many advantages. First of all, it is now more and more expensive to bring up children. If parents have to quit their jobs because of the baby caring problem. They may cost a lot of money more than they pay for the nursery school. In the modern society, if there is only one person who is working in a family. That may result in some imbalance in financial area because man makes all the money. Another advantage of going to school earlier is it can bring some benefit for children. At daytime, children can develop their skills, boost their brain development and increase their independence at school. And after school, children still can get together with their parents. And children can share the school things with them. Parents also can get a plenty of information from school teachers. In conclusion, there are enough advantages to send children to nursery school at young age. I believe that is good for most children. Though it is a little bit challenge for children, it will pay off in future.

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I thought I got your point, but the 'and', you mean I shouldn't start my sentence which is contained 'and'?
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the first advantage is not a direct answer of the question. Q: What do you think are the advantages of attending school from a young age? A: Because it is now more and more expensive to bring up children try not to start your sentence with 'and'

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