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We need a new projector at office! Your valuable feedback as always would be highly appreciated. **** You work in an office. You need new equipment to do your job well. Write a letter to your manager explaining The equipment you need Why you need it? What you want the manager to do? **** Dear Mr. Smith I am writing to respectfully request your approval for purchasing two new portable projectors for the sales and marketing department. The reason for this request is that the projectors which we currently have are quite outdated, and therefore incompatible with the new laptop computers and tablets that are currently in use in the company. As you are aware, when prospective clients visit our company, the sales and marketing department is where they expect to be presented with our latest products and services. Not having a usable projector has meant that we have been unable to use PowerPoint slides in our presentations, and I believe this has negatively affected not only our efficiency but also our brand image. Therefore, I believe purchasing at least two new wireless proctors will assist my colleagues and me (Or I?) to better fulfill our duties. I hope that my request will be taken into consideration. Yours sincerely, Adib Yz

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We need a new projector at the office!

Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to respectfully [this was my fault. See notes] request your approval for the purchase of two new portable projectors for the sales and marketing department. The reason for this request is that the projectors which we currently have are quite outdated, and [are] therefore incompatible with the new laptop computers and tablets that are currently in use in the company.

As you are aware, when prospective clients visit our company, the sales and marketing department is where they expect to be presented with our latest products and services. Not having a usable projector has meant that we have been unable to use PowerPoint slides in our presentations, and I believe this has negatively affected not only our efficiency but also our brand image.

Therefore, I believe purchasing at least two new wireless projectors will / would assist my colleagues and me (Or I?) to better fulfil our duties.

I hope that my request will be taken into consideration.

Yours sincerely,
Adib Yz

This was almost completely flawless! Well done.

"Respectfully"

I have realised that I wasn't specific enough when I told you in my last correction that you could use the word "respectfully" to sound more formal and polite when making requests.

I forgot to specify that it is a word that is normally used only when making awkward requests / complaints / when approaching a subject of a negative nature that you feel a bit awkward about addressing, and you want to smooth things over.

Examples: "I wish to respectfully draw to your attention that payment of your bill is overdue" (awkward situation) or "I wish to respectfully remind you that you are required to reply to this complaint within 10 working days" (you are having to be assertive, but don't want to appear rude) or "I hereby respectfully suggest that it might be a good idea for you to consider disciplining the member of staff who racially abused me" (you want action taken against somebody, but don't want to tell a manager how to do their job) or "I wish to respectfully draw to your attention that I have not yet received the pay rise that I was promised following my recent promotion" (anything related to money that somebody owes somebody else is always an awkward sensitive subject).

It wasn't your fault I forgot to specify that piece of information. I am sorry. I will try to remember to be more specific next time.

In this particular letter, there is nothing particularly awkward or negative about the request that you are making, so it doesn't seem like the right context to use the word "respectfully". I hope this makes sense now that I have explained it better.

We need a new projector at office!

Your valuable feedback as always would be highly appreciated.

****
You work in an office. You need new equipment to do your job well. Write a letter to your manager explaining
The equipment you need
Why you need it?
What do you want the manager to do?
****

Dear Mr. Smith

I am writing for your approval to purchase two new portable projectors for the sales and marketing department. The reason for this request is that the projectors which we currently have are quite outdated, and therefore incompatible with the new laptops and tablets that are currently in used in the company.

As you are aware, when prospective clients visit our company the sales and marketing department is where they expect to be presented with our latest products and services. Not having a usable projector has meant that we have been unable to use PowerPoint slides in our presentations, and I believe this has negatively affected not only our efficiency but also our brand image.

Therefore, I believe purchasing at least two new wireless projectors will assist my colleagues and me (Or I?) to better fulfill our duties.

I hope that my request will be taken into consideration.

Yours sincerely,
Adib Yz

Nothing wrong with what you wrote, Adib. Most of my corrections are just stylistic.

We need a new projector at the office!

Your valuable feedback as always would be highly appreciated.

****
You work in an office. You need new equipment to do your job well. Write a letter to your manager explaining
The equipment you need
Why you need it?
What do you want the manager to do?
****

Dear Mr. Smith

I am writing to respectfully request your approval for purchasing two new portable projectors for the sales and marketing department. The reason for this request is that the projectors which we currently have are quite outdated, and therefore incompatible with the new laptop computers and tablets that are currently in use in the company.

As you are aware, when prospective clients visit our company, the sales and marketing department is where they expect to be presented with our latest products and services. Not having a usable projector has meant that we have been unable to use PowerPoint slides in our presentations, and I believe this has negatively affected not only our efficiency but also our brand image.

Therefore, I believe purchasing at least two new wireless proctors will assist my colleagues and me (Or I?) to better fulfill our duties.

I hope that my request will be taken into consideration.

Yours sincerely,
Adib Yz

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