What will happen in Spain with the climatic change?
Of course, Spain will not be the only affected country by the climatic change. For example, Fiji Islands will be one of the most damaged territories. And not only Fiji, other islands of the Pacific are starting to see how these climate changes are decreasing their coast zones. Vanua Levu island, also, has suffered these results and hundreds of its citizens (of a total of 130.00) have had to go inside because of their homes, on the coast, are being invaded by water. In the Marshall islands is just enough that ocean levels rise a meter for the 80% of its territory be vulnerable. If current tends remains, a report from the World Bank appoint to Maldivas would disappear.
In barely two decades, between 1996 and 2015, Meteorological World Organization has detected 11.000 meteorological anomalies as torrential rains, droughts or floods.
But, What will happen in Spain?. According to the official report of the climatic change in the Spanish Marine Medium, raises in the ocean level will not surpass 3 mm a year. In some islands as Tenerife raises do not even reach 1 mm a year. Coast zones won't suffer this impact. But it does not mean we are safe. A study carry out by the Environment Ministry asserts that more than 70% of the Spanish territory, islands included, are in risk of turning into desert. A result that matches with a study from Science. Two both studies coincide in the date of 2090.
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Thank you for your help Julia. It was a very helpful correction for me.
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Good evening Martin,
I guess you translated this text from Spanish into English. Generally, your style is really good and you will see that most mistakes have to do with prepositions (which is typical of Spanish speaking people) but you can do some exercises to get rid of them.
Sorry for changing the style of correcting: Plesae see the grey parts as crossed out.
Should you not understand one of the explanations, please do not hesitate to ask me.
Kind regards from Germany
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PART 2
If the current trend remains continues, a report from the World Bank appoints, to the Maldives would disappear.
Within barely two decades, between 1996 and 2015, Meteorological World Organization has detected 11,000 meteorological anomalies such as (10) torrential rains, droughts or floods.
(10: fixed)
But what will happen in Spain?
According to the official report of about the climatic (climate) change in the Spanish Marine Medium(11), a sea level rise will not surpass 3 mm a/per year.
(11: According to the report by the Spanish MM? - I could not find the original name. Is this report written by this Spanish MM?)
In For some islands such as Tenerife this (raises) rise does not even reach 1 mm a year. Coast zones won't suffer be affected this impact. But it that (12) does not mean we are safe.
(12: referring back to the fact)
A study (carry) carried out by the Ministry of Environment (Ministry) asserts/explains(13) that more than 70 per cent of the Spanish territory, (all) islands included, are in at risk of turning into desert.
(13: more common, "assert" sounds a bit more aggressive)
This is(14) a result that/which (15) matches with a study from Science.
(14: Always write full sentences. There are only few types of writing that still sound correct whit omissions)
(15: "that" is used in colloquial language; "which" would be the more sophisticated relative pronoun)
Two Both of (16) the two studies coincide(17) in the date of 2090.
(16: fixed; I guess the original would be "los dos")
(17: I'm not sure regarding what the two dates coincide)
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Part 1
What will happen in Spain with (due to) the climatic (1: climate) change?
(1: more common)
(2: it's already specified as c.c.)
For example, the Fiji Islands will be one of the most damaged territories. And not only the Fiji Islands, but also (3) other islands of the Pacific are starting/beginning to see how these changes in the climate are decreasing their coast zones.
(3) fixed expression)
Vanua Levu Island, also, has suffered these results (4) and hundreds of its citizens (5)
(4: either: 1. Also Vanua Levu Island has suffered the same fate" or 2. "Vanua Levu Island has also sufferred". You could write: Vanua Levu Island, too, has suffered...)
(5: of a total of 13,000)( 13,000 in total; remember to write 1.5 per cent but 13,000 people)
have to had to go inside (6)
(6: you state a fact describing the psat so you use past perfect)
because of their homes, which are situated/located on the coast, (7)
(/: you can make things easier for yourself and the reader by using relative clauses)
are (being) flooded/invaded by water. For the Marshall Islands it (subject) is enough
that when ocean sea levels rise a one (8) meter for the 80 per cent (9) of its territory to be vulnerable
(8: it's specified/ a specific measurement of one metre; note AE: meter, BE: metre)
(9: you write 1 per cent but 1.5% - % only if there is a point; - especially in economics)
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