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There are a few characteristics that make me different from the other people. Firstly I agree with Stephen Hawking when he says that intelligence is the ability to adapt to change [1. This isn't wrong, but I'd consider either ending the sentence there or using a semi-colon to make the next point related to it] and I definitely know how to adapt to any and all necessary changes, so getting out of my comfort zone and dealing with it are some of my characteristics. In addition to that, there is my ability to communicate. I believe that knowing how to communicate with different people at different [Not wrong, but consider a synonym. Try not to repeat words in sentences. I'd suggest 'varying' here] levels is one of the essential conditions for success in personal and professional life.Secondly, I believe that we are the fruit of our lifelong experiences and the way that we deal with those experiences, can develop our personality and individuality. For example, after I had lived with many personal difficulties, I learned that we have the ability to overcome any problem in our life no matter how difficult it may seem. In my case I lost my family very early, I grew up without many financial resources and it turned me into someone with big dreams. I grew up in a country where pursuing a medical career is unique to a few and often rich people [I'd try 'confined to the few and often the rich' here], but I always ignored everyone when they told me that I should choose a career that was more within my reach, because I believe that everything is within my reach, [2. I'd maybe break this sentence up here] so the result of this belief is that today I am a pediatrician with great pride.
Finally, I have much to be proud of! As I mentioned earlier, being a doctor it is my greatest professional achievement. Another important factor that I am proud of, it is how I view life positively and how I see challenges as growth opportunities, not as obstacles and finally, I am very proud to be a great mother.
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1. Firstly I agree with Stephen Hawking when he says that intelligence is the ability to adapt to change; I definitely know how to adapt to any and all necessary changes...
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Firstly I agree with Stephen Hawking when he says that intelligence is the ability to adapt to change. I definitely know how to adapt to any and all necessary changes...
2. I grew up in a country where pursuing a medical career is confined to the few and often the rich, but I always ignored people when they told me that I should choose a career that was more within my reach, because I believe that everything is within my reach. The result of this belief is that today I am a pediatrician with great pride.
Hey, Fernanda. Great story and a fantastic attitude. Congratulations on living out your dreams.
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