Correct some tenses please!! Very important
1) The knight had run before the monster could reach him.
2) Hansel and Gretel were dropping some bread pieces to remember the way back home.
3) While Sindbad had been waiting in the valley, a big bird flew over.
4) After Mr. White had made a wish, the monkey’s paw shook and fell on the ground.
In one summer day, we decided to go on a picnic. After we had prepared some food, we sat off. We went to the mountain. Everything was amazing after rain. The sun was shining brightly and the view from the mountain was stunning. My dad picked for us a nice spot under a big tree. We laid a mat and prepared for lunch. After we had had our lunch, my brother and I climbed some trees.
Suddenly, the clouds started to gather. We decided to leave. As we returned back, it started to rain. My father drove away. We came to cross a water stream, then there was a water raising. The car couldn’t move and we were trapped in. We started to shout after we had moved to the top of the car. However, no one was there to rescue. While we were screaming for help, dad called the police. It didn’t take long until they arrived and rescued us.
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Correct some tenses please!! Very important
1) The knight had run away before the dragon could roast him.2) Hansel and Gretel were dropping some breadcrumbs to remember the way back home.
3) While Sindbad was waiting* in the valley, a big bird flew over.
4) After Mr. White (had)** made a wish, the monkey’s paw shook and fell to the ground.
One summer day we decided to go on a picnic. After we (had) prepared some food we sat off. We went to the mountain. Everything was amazing after the rain. The sun shone brightly and the view from the mountain was stunning. My dad picked for us a nice spot under a big tree. We laid a cloth and prepared for lunch. After we had our food, my brother and I climbed some trees.***
Suddenly the clouds started to gather. We decided to leave. When we got/came back, it started to rain. We drove away and came to cross a stream. Then the water rose and the car got stuck and we were trapped inside. We broke out and started to shout from the top of the car. However, no one heard us. While we were screaming for help, dad called the police. It didn’t take long for them to come and rescue us.
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*or, while he waited in ..
**after he made a wish = after he had made a wish ..... here. So 'had' really adds nothing. Try to use 'had' only to clarify that the event is over. Often 'had' is redundant, as here, and one can use the (simpler) simple past.
***after we ate = after we had eaten = after we had ... our food we climbed some trees ... are all good English here, and all mean exactly the same. Personally, I would use 'after we ate we climbed... ' since this allows us to omit 'our food' (what else but 'food' could you eat?).
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Correct some tenses please!! Very important
1) The knight ran had run before the monster could reach him.2) Hansel and Gretel dropped were dropping some bread pieces to remember the way back home.
3) While Sindbad waited had been waiting in the valley, a big bird flew over.
4) After Mr. White had made a wish, the monkey’s paw shook and fell on the ground.
In one summer day, we decided to go on a picnic. After we had prepared some food, we sat set off. We went to the mountain. Everything was amazing after the rain came. The sun was shining brightly and the view from the mountain was stunning. My dad picked for us a nice spot under a big tree. We laid a mat and prepared for lunch. After we had had our lunch, my brother and I climbed some trees.
Suddenly, the clouds started to gather. We decided to leave. As we returned back, it started to rain. My father drove away. We came to across a water stream, then where there was a water raising rising. The car couldn’t move and we were trapped in. We started to shout after we had moved to the top of the car. However, no one was there to rescue us. While we were screaming for help, dad then called the police. It didn’t take long until they arrived and rescued us.
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Correct some tenses please!! Very important
1) The knight had run before the monster could reach him.2) Hansel and Gretel were dropping some bread pieces to remember the way back home. ["Pieces" is correct, but we would say "crumbs"]
3) While Sindbad
4) After Mr. White had made a wish, the monkey’s paw shook and fell on the ground.
Suddenly, the clouds started to gather. We decided to leave. As we returned
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