This is my room This is my room, my bed is large and white with light blue and white pillows, there are two pictures on the wall above my bed. My bed is near a large window with curtains. The window

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Daniela Perez

This is my room This is my room, my bed is large and white with light blue and white pillows, there are two pictures on the wall above my bed. My bed is near a large window with curtains. The window is to the left of the bed. Next to to bed on the left, there is a small white table with a lamp and telephone in it. There is also a white table and a white chair. There is a mirror on the wall above the table, my room is white and large.

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This is my room

My room is large and white. My bed is also large and white, with light blue and white pillows, there are two pictures
on the wall above my bed. To the left of the bed, there is a large window with curtains.
The window is to the left of the bed , there is also a small white table with a lamp
and telephone on it on the left side of the bed.

There is also a white table and a white chair (where?). There is a mirror on the wall above the table.

This is My Room

This is my room, My bed is large and white with light blue and white pillows. There are two pictures
on the wall above my bed. My bed is near a large window with curtains.
The window is to the left of the bed. Next to the bed on the left, there is a small white table with a lamp
and telephone in it.
There is also a white table and a white chair. There is a mirror on the wall above the table, my room is
white and large.

You wrote a good title. However, don't repeat it in the text, it degrades the value of your text.

This is my room

Comentario: Si es un titulo, por favor capitlizá "My Room". Prepositions such as "is" are rarely capitalized.

This is my room, my bed is large and white with light blue and white pillows, there are two pictures
on the wall above my bed. My bed is near a large window with curtains.

Comentario: The above sentence contains a comma between "room" and "my" and also "pillows" and "there". This usage may sound correct when spoken but when written breaks the thoughts incorrectly. If you wish to shift between ideas, consider a semicolon ";" to stay within one sentence. I have written a few short legal articles and the goal is always clarity and simplicity. I suggest:

"This is my room. My bed is large and white with light blue and white pillows. There are two pictures on the wall above my bed. My bed is near a large window with curtains."

"This is my room. My bed is large and white with light blue and white pillows and near a large window with curtains. There are two pictures on the wall above my bed."

The second example uses "and" to create a longer sentence but still keep ideas clear. Unless seeking a special style, keep your thoughts clear. Discussing some topics requires more complex thoughts but longer sentences do not make a person appear smarter.

Original: The window is to the left of the bed. Next to to bed on the left, there is a small white table with a lamp
and telephone in it.

Comentario: Hay dos Métodos para revisar este oración. One is to add a "," between "bed" and "on". The idea "on the left" is an additional item of information. Si no lo incluye, también es beuno. El otro es "There is a small white table to the left of the bed with a lamp and telephone on it."

There is also a white table and a white chair. There is a mirror on the wall above the table, my room is white and large.

Comentario: Las últimas palabras son apartados. "...table. My room...".

Lo siento/lamento que mi español es tan malo. Si no entiendes mis palabra, por favor escríbeme aquí.

Nice paragraph, just some small mistakes

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