writing part. IELTS ESSAY
QUESTION: Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tension and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.
ANSWER:
Each year, there are many international sporting that represent whole country proud, like competitions in bicycle, swimming among many others. However the most popular and famous sport around the word is the football, that is why each four years, the best teams in this sport face each other. Is immense the influence that the football has over international tension due to a lot of people stop all activities to watch the matches.
First of all, from the ancient History the Olympic Games has been an important occasion to resolve problems, for instance Greeks and Romans would interrupt battles to be part of the games. Besides currently the sports have helped so much to easing some differences, thanks to each day more and more people want to practice and make friends through the sports.
Secondly, international sporting events offer to community many benefits due to government and many companies consider that the days when these sports are celebrated, there are many economic opportunities to other countries know the tourism, and it provokes an amazing feeling of pride in the respective country. For example the last football world cup help to Brazilians forget for a time the current troubles like corruption and lack of education etc.
In conclusion each sport and each game represent a new opportunity to improve and show always the best face of countries, also play an important role in decreasing international tension and economic situations.
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writing part. IELTS ESSAY
QUESTION: Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tension and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way.ANSWER:
Each year, there are many international sporting events that represent whole country proud (represent their country with pride/represent their country's pride/make their whole country proud), like competitions in bicycle bicycling, swimming among many others. However, the most popular and famous sport around the word is the football. That is why each every four years, the best teams in this sport face each other. It is immense the influence that the football has over international tension due to a lot of people stopping all activities to watch the matches.
First of all, from the ancient history, the Olympic Games has have been an important occasion to resolve problems. For instance, Greeks and Romans would interrupt battles to be part of the games. Besides, currently the sports have helped so much to easing some differences, thanks to how each day more and more people want to practice and make friends through the sports.
Secondly, international sporting events offer the community many benefits due to the time off that government and many companies provide when these sports are celebrated. Also, there are many economic opportunities for other countries because of tourism, and it provides an amazing feeling of pride in the respective country. to the community many benefits due to government and many companies consider that the days when these sports are celebrated, there are many economic opportunities to other countries know the tourism, and it provokes an amazing feeling of pride in the respective country. For example, the last football world cup helped to Brazilians to forget for a time the current troubles, like corruption, and lack of education, etc. In conclusion, each sport and each game not only represents a new opportunity to improve and show always the best face of countries, it also plays an important role in decreasing international tensions and economic situations.
Great work Leonardo! I know I made a lot of corrections, but I understand everything you were writing! I would focus on the sentence "rewrites" I made in your second point about international sporting events, especially the word "consider". In the US, we use the word "observe" for holidays. Maybe this is what you meant?
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