Secondly- Please help to correct my text: USING A COMPUTER EVERY DAY CAN HAVE MORE NEGATIVE THAN POSOTIVE EFFECTS ON YOUR CHILDREN? DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? However, the computers can be used as a gr

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Secondly- Please help to correct my text: USING A COMPUTER EVERY DAY CAN HAVE MORE NEGATIVE THAN POSOTIVE EFFECTS ON YOUR CHILDREN? DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? However, the computers can be used as a great educational tool. Students can have access to all sort of information on the internet. Some great websites like Wikipedia, Code Academy and Byte notes provides free resources for children students , for instance in many schools currently are implemented new technologies through computers in order to help students learn faster and much more things about current topics. In Conclusion, the computers offer more benefits when used with responsibility for children, with adult supervision.

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Secondly- Please help to correct my text:

USING A COMPUTER EVERY DAY CAN HAVE MORE NEGATIVE THAN POSITIVE EFFECTS ON YOUR CHILDREN? DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?
However, *Computers can be used as a great educational tool. Students can have access to all sort of information on the internet. Some great websites like Wikipedia, Code Academy and Byte notes provide** free resources for children students. For*** instance, in many schools have are**** implemented new technologies through computers in order to help students learn faster and much more things about current topics.
In conclusion*****, the computers****** offer more benefits when used with responsibility for children, with adult supervision.

*You need to state something before using "However". It can only open sentences following an opinion or statement. Never start answering a question with this opener word.

** I think the verb "Provide" should be singular. It sounds more natural. Unfortunately, I can't explain why grammatically.

*** Probably would be a good idea to start a new sentence. You never want them to be too long.

**** Never use currently with "implemented". Currently can only be used with verbs in the present tense.

***** It's not necessary to capitalize "conclusion".

****** No need to use the article "the" here. It doesn't sound natural. I think I do the opposite when I speak Spanish so I understand.

Good work. Hope this helps!

responsibly -- adverb. In a responsible or trustworthy manner Use your credit card responsibly or you will have lots of financial problems. responsibility -- noun You have the responsbility to pay your credit card balance on time. In your paragraph, you want to say use RESPONSIBLY. Computers offer benefits when used responsibly.

USING A COMPUTER EVERY DAY CAN HAVE MORE NEGATIVE THAN POSOTIVE EFFECTS ON YOUR CHILDREN? DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE? However, the computers can be used as a great educational tool. Students can have access to all sorts of information on the internet. Some great websites like Wikipedia, Code Academy and Byte notes provide free resources for children students , for instance in many schools currently are implement new computer technologies through computers in order to help students learn more and faster and much more things about current topics. In Conclusion, the computers offer more benefits for children when used with responsibility for children, and adult supervision.

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