An essay (CAE Preparation)
Hello All,
Could you please take a look at the essay below? Honestly speaking, I believe it is not the best example of my writing, so I would be grateful to anyone who may bring some of my mistakes to my attention. Thank you!
There are several opinions about how young people may benefit from competitive sport. In this essay I would like to put two of them into perspective - positive attitude and healthy lifestyle.
Generally, sport can be divided into two categories, team and individual. I firmly believe that those teenagers who participate in team sport have every chance to improve their communication and collaboration skills. On the other hand, individual sport has its positive effects too. The people involved in such activities have to be determined, all-sufficient and confident in their abilities. What is out of the question is that any kind of sport may have a great deal of positive impact on anyone's personality.
Another beneficial effect of regular exercises is healthy lifestyle. Although professional sport is tightly connected with injuries, usually it is not an issue for amateur sport. Not only may young people benefit from training, but sport can also motivate them to give up adverse habits, such as smoking. In addition, mental health will also benefit from the exercises as it is one of the best ways to cope with stress.
In conclusion, I would like to say that young people may benefit from sport in the both ways which have been discussed below. It is definitely the case when they can kill two birds with one stone.
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An essay (CAE Preparation)
Hello everyone,Could you please take a look at the essay below? Honestly, I believe it is not the best example of my writing, so I would be grateful to anyone who may correct some of my mistakes. (What you said wasn’t gramatically incorrect- it’s just no-one would say it in English the way you did.) Thank you!
There are several opinions about how young people may benefit from competitive sport. In this essay I would like to put two of them into perspective - positive attitudes and healthy lifestyle.
Generally, sport can be divided into two categories- team sports and individual sports. I firmly believe that those teenagers who participate in team sport have every chance to improve their communication and collaboration skills. On the other hand, individual sports has its positive effects too. People who play sports have to be determined and confident in their abilities. (All sufficient is a strange word to use.) It is out of the question that all kind of sports have a great deal of positive impact on anyone's personality.
Another beneficial effect of regular exercise is a healthy lifestyle that you obtain. Although professional sport often results in injuries, usually, injury is not an problem for amateur sport. Not only may young people benefit from training, but sport can also motivate them to give up adverse habits, such as smoking. In addition, mental health will also benefit from the exercises as it is one of the best ways to cope with stress.
In conclusion, I would like to say that young people may benefit from sport in two ways which have been discussed above. Clearly, as shown above, by doing sport you can kill two birds with one stone.
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Hello Grzegorz, thank you for your comment.
Well, nowadays children are often more concerned about playing computer games and different gadgets than doing exercises. Actually, it is understandable as these activities (gadgets etc.) do not demand any special skills and, what's more, efforts. As a result, people (not only young, by the way) may spend hours whiling away and doing nothing in particular. So, we have to motivate our children somehow and show them that participating in group activities and socializing is an indispensable part of our life.
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It is so interesting topic which I am deeply concerned about. Now I see that young people don't like practice any sport regularly. I must motivate my daughter to ride a bike or to go to the swimming pool. She is not willing to participate in any group activity. This trend seems to be common among young people. I am concerned because when I was young I didn't have easy access to any sports facilities except for football and running. Now children have a possibility of enjoying in many ways of activity but they are lazy.
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