Short TOEFL Writing Answer
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, children have to start (since they are young) to think "with their mind".
It will be parent's purpose drive them in the right direction and make them understand what is right and what is wrong.
I think that if the children don't start since they are young to understand how the Television advertising work and what it wants to achieve, they will have probably problems in the future. For example, if a child don't see or listen an advertise direct to him for 5 years, when he will grew up, until 8 or 9 years old, he will trust almost everything a person says in TV because he says it, because he is an adult and the children have to listen always them.
So it is not a company's problem if they try to convince children to buy their products: the company is doing its work, sell stuff for earn something and the easiest way to do it is to convince the children. If a father or a mother will be right enough to make understand the child that what he wants to buy is only a useless thing, there won't be problems. It is not a company's problem, but a parents'.
In the other side, if a child is always in front of the TV and the parents allow him to buy all he wants, problems will grew up.
But I repeat, is not a problem of the TV advertise, parents have to be more strict and reduce the hours in front of it.
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Short TOEFL Writing Answer
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In my opinion, children have to start (sincefrom when they are young) to think "with their own mind".
It will should be their parent's purpose to drive them in the right direction and make them understand what is right and what is wrong.
I think that if the children don't start since when they are young to understand how the Television advertising works and what it wants to achieve, they will probably have probably problems in the future. For example, if a child don't doesn't see or listen to an advertisement directed to at him for 5 years, when he will grew up, until even when he is 8 or 9 years old, he will trust almost everything a person says in TV because he says it, because he is an adult and the children always have to listen always them.
So it is not a company's problem if they try to convince children to buy their products: the company is doing its work, sell stuff for to earn something and the easiest way to do it is to convince the children. If a father or a mother will be right enough to make understand the child that what he wants to buy is only a useless thing, there won't be problems. It is not a the company's problem, but a the parents'.
InOn the other sidehand, if a child is always in front of the TV and the parents allow him to buy all he wants, problems will happen as he grew grows up.
But I repeat, it is not a problem of the TV advertisers, parents have to be more strict and reduce the hours in front of it the TV.
Great essay! I see your point--parents have to raise their kids the right way. Most of your problems were focused on grammar--lots of little connective words such as at, to, a, the, their were confusing to you. However, I understood what you were saying well. Just working on prepositions, pronouns, and verb tense and your writing should improve rapidly.
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