Dormitory
Every time after the bell ring over, noises come into the dormitory because of students on the way to their dorm. They are talking with their classmates about what to eat, what to do to entertain, and how they spend the rest of the today.
On stepping into our dormitory, there are three double beds, desks on the each side of along narrow passageways. There is also an empty space facing the sun at the end of passageways. When the sun goes rise, several bunches of a light yellow sunlight go into our dormitory, and fall on the floor. Sometime, someone when out of blue, make a cough, which catch all of us attention.
Dear friend. This is Jeff. I have written a essay about our dormitory and I will put a picture, and the picture I posted below is not mine. My dormitory is tinny, clean.☺️☺️
Please help me correcting my essay. Thanks in advance!!
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Dormitory
Every time day after the bell rings over, noises come into the dormitory (fills with the sound of) because of students on their way to the dorm. They are talking with their classmates (or even better talking to each other) about what to eat, what to do for entertainment to entertain, and how they to spend the rest of the today.On stepping into our dormitory, there are (or we see or one sees) three double beds (and) desks on the each side of the narrow passageways. There is also an empty (or open) space facing the sun at the end of passageways. When the sun goes rise (As the sun rises), several bunches of a light rays of yellow sunlight go enter into our dormitory, and fall on (maybe better to say here -- shine on, reflect off, or light up) the floor. Sometimes, when someone coughs when out of blue (or unexpectedly), make a cough, which it catches all of us our attention.
Dear friend. This is Jeff. I have written a essay about our dormitory and I will put a picture, and the picture I posted below is not mine. My dormitory is tinny, clean.☺️☺️
Please help me correcting my essay. Thanks in advance!! 我很高兴帮助你
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啊哈哈哈 是的。当时是我看到你发了个问题 我关注了后面有人帮你解释 我不明白所以我就加了你
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好久不见,回来看到你上一次登录是两个月前了,看到你也有上过一节课,在爱拓奇上。你明明是很认真学习的,不知道为什么当初却向我发来好友请求,大概那时候爱拓奇的teenagers比较少,所以才惺惺惜惺惺吧。点开你的小作文不知道为什么忽然间泪流满面止也止不住……两年多没登了没想到你还加着我。你列表好友也没几个可见并不是那种随便加很多人的朋友,我不知道自己当初何德何能被你加着然后一直到现在,回想这么多年忽然很感慨唏嘘不已,不知道为什么心里和难受……祝好!
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