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As is vividly depicted in the picture, a football match of supporting parents is going on. The eldest son kicked out the elderly father, while other children guarded their goals.
Apparently, the drawing is a sharp satire on the common social problem-elder maltreatment. For the sake of their own interest, nowadays many young people regard their aged parents as a burden and seek ways to shirk the duty of taking them. However, this illegal and unethical behavior will not only lead to serious mental damage to the old but also affect the social values badly. In consequence, necessary measures must be undertaken to improve the present situation.
As far as I am concerned, firstly it is imperative for governments to make relevant laws and regulations to punish those who fail to fulfill obligations of supporting their parents. Moreover, for cultivate the awareness of filial piety, the moral education on the young generation should be reinforced. As long as everyone realize that there is no license for him to abandon his parents who spared no pains to rear him, this problem could be solved thoroughly.
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Could you help me correct my writing? Thanks!
As is vividly depicted in the picture, a football match of supporting parents is going on. The eldest son kicked out the elderly father, while other children guarded their goals.Apparently, the drawing is a sharp satire on of the common social problem-elder maltreatment. For the sake of their own interest, nowadays many young people regard their aged parents as a burden and seek ways to shirk the duty of taking care of them. However, this illegal and unethical behavior will not only lead to serious mental damage to of the old but also affect the social values badly. In consequence, necessary measures must be undertaken to improve the present situation.
As far as I am concerned, firstly it is imperative for governments to make relevant laws and regulations to punish those who fail to fulfill obligations of supporting their parents. Moreover, for to cultivate the awareness of filial piety, the moral education on the young generation should be reinforced. As long as everyone realizes that there is no license for him to abandon his parents who spared no pains to rear him, this problem could be solved looked into thoroughly.
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