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My friend and I went to Kamo river which is one of the famous sites. There a few birds were resting in the river. It was picturesque and made me feel soothing.
I like to walk along the river side roads and like to listen the murmuring of river and any nature sounds.
He likes the river too. We were walking along sides of the river slowly and talking a lot of things.
We didn't sit down and just cared of some mosquitos and bugs on the river sides. We saw several the restaurants which offers al fresco dining from there.
Afterwords, we walk along the narrow streets both sides of restaurants. There are a variety of four-star restaurants, bars and cafes. My friend and I were astonished a Russian vodkas bar there. Wow~! My friend can read Russian and told me some words. there is such a diverse area.
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My friend and I (You are right: The personal pronoun "I" should be used here as it is in the subject case. "me" should not be used here as it is in the object case. In your sentence, "My friend and I" are subjects, not objects of the verb "went".) went to Kamo river which is one of the famous ("sights" means places of interest for tourists or visitors.) sights. sites. There a A few birds were resting in by / on ("in" may be somewhat misleading as it means the birds were resting while under the water. We can use "by" if the birds were resting beside the river or "on" if the birds were resting on the surface of the water.) the river. It was picturesque and made me feel soothing calm. ("soothing" means something that frees you from bodily discomfort. Example: Stepping into an air-conditioned mall on a hot summer day was very soothing.)
He likes the river too. We were walking along the riverside sides of the river slowly and talking about a lot of things.
We didn't sit down and just cared of some as we were mindful of the mosquitoes and bugs along the riverbank. on the river sides. We saw several the restaurants which offers al fresco dining from there.
Afterwards, we walked along the narrow streets which are lined on both sides with of restaurants. There are is a variety of four-star restaurants, bars and cafes. My friend and I were astonished to see a Russian vodkas bar selling vodkas there. Wow! My friend can read Russian and told explained to me the meaning of some Russian words. there is It is such a culturally-diverse area.
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Me and my friend went to visit the famous Kamo River. There was plenty of wildlife along the riverbanks. The view was picturesque, which gave me a soothing feeling. I like to walk along the paths next to the river and taking in the sights and sounds of the environment.
My friend liked the river too. We spent some time walking along the river path and talking about various topics.
We couldn't sit down in one place as there was mosquitoes and bugs around, we saw several restaurants which offered Al fresco dining.
After enjoying our meal, we decided to walk around the town and explore. There was plenty of bars and cafes. We were astonished that there was a Russian Vodka bar also. As my friend is Russian we decided to go and he translated the menu for me. It was such a diverse area.
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