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there's someone who can check my work? (TOEFL integrated task) Thanks!!! the author explains the influence of the cell phone in our life nowadays, especially how them have negatively influenced people’s driving habits. On the other hand, the speaker describes that cell phones aren’t a negative tools for drivers. In the reading passage the author asserts that “cell phone use has risen dramatically”, as a result people use to use them while driving. Because of that, in the last years, there were a lot of accidents. These devices have increased the safety problems on the road. For this reason, a lot of countries created law against the using of cell phones while driving. For example, the author wrote that in some countries it is “completely prohibited”. There aren’t only negative aspects about cell phones, the speaker thinks that them have brought a lot of improvement in the highways. It is true that there are accidents caused by these devices, but statistical researches show that more than 80% of accidents are caused by other things such a drinking, reading or using GPS. In addition, cell phones helps people when they are in danger, they can call for emergency. In conclusion, cell phones could be useful, however, it is important to use them with caution.

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there's Is there someone who can check my work? (TOEFL integrated task) Thanks!!!

The author explains the influence of the cell phone in our life nowadays, especially how them they have negatively influenced people’s driving habits. On the other hand, the speaker describes that cell phones aren’t a negative tools for drivers.
In the reading passage the author asserts that “cell phone use has risen dramatically". (Put a full stop instead a comma here) As a result, people use to use them while driving. Because of that, in the last years, there were a lot of accidents.,which caused a lot of accidents in the past few years. These devices have increased the safety problems on the road. For this reason, a lot of countries created a law against the using of (You can say either "the use of" or "using"-without "the")cell phones while driving. For example, the author wrote that in some countries it is “completely prohibited”.
There aren’t only negative aspects about cell phones, the speaker thinks that them they have brought a lot of improvement in the highways. While it is true that there are accidents caused by these devices, but statistical researches show that more than 80% of accidents are caused by other things (While "things" are acceptable, I would use "factors" instead) such as drinking, reading or using the GPS. In addition, cell phones helps help people when they are in danger, they can by calling for the emergency services.
In conclusion, cell phones could be useful, however, it is important to use them with caution.

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