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Which band would I get in IELTS for this essay? Corporate social responsibility, known as CSR, has become one of the most argumentative issues nowadays. CSR refers to the responsibilities that corporations have towards their communities, societies and the world - which I think that we should fight against. Any business in the world cares for nothing more than its investments, shares and reputation. Some corporations may sponsor social projects such as building schools, houses for homeless people, or paving roads and this can be seen as a waste of money. However, these actions serve as a publicity stunt, a marketing device to gain customer loyalty and to publicly magnify the company’s image. So, it becomes apparent that spending such money is nothing but a new, innovative way of advertising. Some people may still think that CSR is beneficial as the projects undertaken by corporations have a positive impact on the development of societies. While this may be true, we must not ignore that allowing big companies to carry out projects that the government should be responsible for or it can’t afford will lead these companies to be dominant players in the society. Moreover, most of these companies are international and their roles may become suspicious especially if the government’s role is absent. To sum up, I believe that opening up opportunities for big companies to socially participate in setting up projects will dwarf the government’s role in the society when it’s the government’s responsibility to regulate the work of these companies.

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Which band would I get in IELTS for this essay?

Corporate Social Rresponsibility, aka CSR, has become one of the most argumentative issues nowadays. CSR refers to the responsibilities that corporations have towards the community, society and the world - (which I think that we should fight against. ?)

Every business in the world cares solely for its investments, shares and reputation. Some corporations may sponsor social projects such as building schools, houses for the homeless, or paving roads and this can be seen as a waste of money. However, these actions serve as a publicity stunt, a marketing device to gain customer loyalty and to publicly magnify the company’s image. So, it becomes apparent that spending such money is nothing but a new, innovative way of advertising.

Some people may still think that CSR is beneficial as the projects undertaken by corporations (have a positive impact on the development of societies)*. While this may be true, we must not forget that allowing big companies to carry out projects rightly government's responsibility or those that the government cannot afford will lead these companies to be dominant players in society. Moreover, most of these companies are international and their roles may become suspect especially when the government’s role is absent.

To sum up, I believe that letting big companies do social projects will lessen government’s role when government should regulate these companies' works.

*or, 'help us.'

I do not know enough about IELTS to advise whether they would prefer your version of * or mine. I suspect that you are on the right track, and that they would prefer yours.

Very well written!


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