[ A Serbian friend of mine came to Kyoto79 ]

Would you mind correcting my essay? If you were me, how would
you go about writing it?
Which part should I describe with details? I hope my explanations are clear. I hope you can understand.

(Part-Five)

A mMy friend and I stopped by a nice atmosphere old Japanese cafe with an older atmosphere. The cafe is located near the exit of Kiyomizu temples sites. [Or, if the cafe is attached to the temple, you'd say: The cafe is located at the exit of the Kiyomizu temple.]

There were several red carpets and cushions laid on the stands. There were small folding type tables on the stands. The cafe waitress wore habitual traditional uniforms.

We were pretty thirsty. ThenSo, we ordered two green-teas on ice, flavored crunch rushed ice mixed with condensed milk. I knew that was good. [Not sure what you meant with "crunch rushed ice mixed". Or maybe shaved ice?]

We didn't talk while drinking dulling our eating these. It was amazing. He agreed with me that the drink had a good tastethese nice tastes. The cafe serves natural ice is because it is of soft and so impressive. [Not sure what natural ice is]