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Past experience Today I'm going to write about a past experience. As I always said, I'm sorry for my english level but I want to write every day to improve my english. It is part of my learning process and I don't want to give up. Specifically, my writing is about my last season playing football. Last year I decided that it would be my last season playing football for my town team. The season was being perfect, I scored many goals and the team won many matches. But I had a problem in the last match of December in 2016, I injured doing a non-expected move. The rival team tried to help me and for that they offered me its medical team in order to that fact that I could return before. That team had the better medical team in the league. At first, I was very worried because I thought that I was away from the field for some months and that the injury was serious. However, the injury wasn't so serious, it was only a injury in my ankle (second grade injury) and I hadn't affected my knee. So, I could return before than expected, in only 1 month! During my absence, the team lost some matches and we were away from first positions, but I didn't think about that and I started to train hard with the goal of getting first league positions. We could get the third position and we were very happy and celebrated it with the family and the whole team. At the end of the season, I didn't want to leave the team because I knew that I missed it. Therefore, I talked with my confidence people as well as my family and even so we decided together that I had to leave the team because I needed to be focused in order to get a job. Now, I'm looking for a job because I have just finished the University career and I consider that it's already time to work. In addition, I have new aims with my girlfriend. We want to rent a flat to live together, buy a new car, etc. I think that it never has to leave your hobbies if you haven't reasons for that. However, it's true that it always arrives the moment when I have to leave them to be focused in other important stuff.

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Past experience

Today, I'm going to write about a past experience. As I always said, I'm sorry for my English level but I want to write every day to improve my English. It is part of my learning process and I don't want to give up.

Specifically, my writing is about my last season playing football. Last year I decided that it would be my last season playing football for my town team. The season was going perfectly. I scored many goals and the team won many matches. But this all changed when I had a problem in the last match of December in 2016. I injured myself doing an unexpected move. The rival team tried to help me by offering me their medical team in order to that fact that I could return before (?). That team had the best medical team in the league. At first, I was very worried because I thought that I was away from the field for some months and that the injury was serious. However, the injury wasn't so serious. It was only an injury in my ankle (second grade injury) and I hadn't affected my knee. I could return earlier than expected, in only 1 month! During my absence, the team lost some matches, but I didn't think about that and I started to train hard with the goal of getting first league positions. We got the third position and we were very happy and celebrated it with the family and the whole team. At the end of the season, I didn't want to leave the team because I knew that I would miss it. Therefore, I talked with my friends and family and we decided together that I had to leave the team because I needed to focus on getting a job.

Now, I'm looking for a job because I have just finished studying at university and I think that it's already time to work. In addition, I have new aims with my girlfriend. We want to rent a flat to live together, buy a new car, etc.

I think that you never have to leave your hobbies if you don't have a reason to. However, it's true that the moment always arrives when I have to leave them to focus on other important things.
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Past experience

Today I'm going to write about a past experience. As I have always said, I'm m sorry for my English level, but I want to write every day to improve my English. It is part of my learning process and I don't want to give up.

Specifically, my writing is about my last season playing football. Last year, I decided that it would be my last season playing football for my town's team. The season was going perfect; I scored many goals and the team won many matches. But, I had a problem in the last match of December in 2016; I injured myself doing an unplanned move. The rival team tried to help me by offering me their medical team - they were  the best medical team in the league. At first, I was very worried because I thought that I would be away from the football field for many months and that the injury was serious. However, the injury wasn't so serious, it was only an injury to my ankle (second grade injury) and it hadn't affected my knee. So, I could return sooner than expected, in only 1 month! During my absence, the team lost some matches and we were losing positions in the league, but I didn't think about that and I started to train hard with the goal of getting improving my team's position in the league. We got third position and were very happy. We celebrated it with the family and the whole team. At the end of the season, I didn't want to leave the team because I knew that I missed it. Therefore, I talked with my people to improve my confidence as well as  my family and together we decided that I had to leave the team because I needed to focus on getting a job.

Now, I think it is time to look for a job because I have finished University. In addition, I have new aims with my girlfriend. We want to rent a flat to live together, buy a new car, etc.

I think that you should never leave your hobbies unless you have good reasons. However, it's true that there will always be a moment when I have to leave them to focus on other important stuff.


Hello Rubén.

Excellent story. I loved how you portrayed your emotions and passion for football. I have made corrections for you. If you would like to learn more about how you can improve your English then I would love the opportunity to teach you. Please let me know if you would like my help and we can figure out a plan for you to improve your English even more quickly. Speak soon. David.



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