A wise man and a young man
(I try to translate a short story for practicing my writing. And I believe there are many grammar mistakes and bad English in my essay, thank you for helping me to revise them. And please feel free to change the sentences even it is changed the story. )
Long long ago, when life gets difficulties and annoyance, people tend to consult a wise man for acquiring some advices or solutions. One day, a young man walked a long way for meeting an old wise man who was well-known by all the people in the country for his wisdom, vision and lofty prestige.
Fate is too unfair to me! I am too poor to marry the girl who I deeply love to. The young man complained. After a short silence, the old man picked up a stone slowly instead of answering anything, then he threw it to the grass field where also lays same stone everywhere. Go to find it out, young man! The old man asked. The young man sought it for a while and gave up soon. The old man then took off his ring, which is a glisten and studded with a large ruby, and threw it to the same grass field as well. Due to that ring was very shiny under the sunlight, the young man finds it out immediately this time. Meanwhile, an imperceptible smile flashed across the eyes of the old man, then he closed his eyes and said: ‘stop complaining, son, as long as you work hard, I believe the gold will shine’
There was not any answer back. When he opened his eyes again, he saw. The young man was running as fast as he can to his coming direction with holding that golden ring.
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A wise man and a young man
(Im trying to translate a short story to practice my writing. And I believe there are many grammar mistakes and bad English in my essay, thank you for helping me to revise them. And please feel free to change the sentences even if it changed the story. )Long long ago, whenever the life gets difficult and annoying, people tend to consult a wise man for acquiring some advices or solutions. One day, a young man walked a very long way for meeting an old wise man who was well-known by all the people in the country for his wisdom, vision and lofty prestige.
Fate is too unfair to me! I am too poor to marry the girl who I deeply in love with , The young man complained. After a short silence, the old man picked up a stone slowly instead of answering anything, then he threw it to the grass field where also lays same stone everywhere. Go and find it, young man! The old man said . The young man sought it for a while and gave up soon. The old man then took off his ring, which is a glisten and studded with a large ruby, and threw it to the same grass field as well. Due to that ring was very shiny under the sunlight, the young man finds it out immediately this time. Meanwhile, an imperceptible smile flashed across the eyes of the old man, then he closed his eyes and said: ‘stop complaining, son, as long as you work hard, I believe the gold will shine’
It would be more pretty to say ( the gold will always shine under any circumstances , as long as you work hard )
There was no answer back. When he opened his eyes again, the young man was running as fast as he could and he then quickly cross the door holding the golden ring and the old man never saw that man again neither his ring .
You are a very amazing translator [emoji]
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