What a awful journey!
Hi John,
sorry for not writing earlier but we’ve had a lot of problems. In fact, I’m going to tell you about our adventure. Last week, we planned to go from Genova to Barcelona where we had rented a house. So we set off in the morning to try to avoid the traffic and we got the motorway to get Montecarlo. We would have taken about two hours but we had got stuck because there was a great traffic jam. Not only, when we were driving along the Monaco’s narrow streets, suddenly a wheel burst and we had to stop the car. We had the wheel repaired by a tyre dealer and we restarted off our journey. Finally we arrived at the port where we had our boat. Next day, we left by boat to get Barcelona. The first part of the journey was fine and we also stopped the boat in front of a beach to relax and take a bath. The following day, although weather forecast told us that it would have been good, it was cloudy but always warm. At night, when we’re sailing towards Nizza, the weather got worse, the worst I’ve ever seen. We’re in the middle of a terrible storm: it started raining, the wind blew hard and the sea became rough. Whereas we’re trying to hold the boat, the wind was blowing so hard that it broke our sails. Not only, when we lowered the sails we realized that we had lost our satnav. We were going in the wrong direction and we didn’t know where we were! What a awful journey! Nevertheless, the violent storm calmed down very soon and the waves got smaller. The terrible storm had thrown our boat very faraway, but in the morning we could see where we were. As soon as we found our route, we thought to go back.
That’s all for now. Looking forward to hearing from you very soon.
Cheers
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What a awful journey!
Hi John,Sorry for not writing earlier but we’ve had a lot of problems. In fact, I’m going to tell you about our adventure. Last week, we planned to go from Genova to Barcelona where we had rented a house. So we set off in the morning to try to avoid the traffic and we got using the motorway to get to Montecarlo. It should We would have taken about two hours but we had got stuck (alt. were delayed) because there was a great traffic jam. Not only that, whenwhile we were driving along the Monaco’s narrow streets, suddenly a wheel burst (US English tire blew out) and we had to stop the car. We had the wheel repaired by a tyre dealer and we restarted off our journey. Finally we arrived at the port where we had our boat. The next day, we left by boat to get to Barcelona. The first part of the journey was fine and we also stopped (were able to stop) the boat in front of a beach to relax and take a bath (bathe, sunbathe, swim?). The following day, although the weather forecast told us that it would have been good (predicted a good day), it was cloudy but always (and rather(?)) warm. At night (or That night), when while we’re sailing towards Nizza, the weather got worse, the worst I’ve ever seen. We’re in the middle of a terrible storm: it started raining, the wind blew hard and the sea became rough. WhereasWhile we’re trying to hold (control) the boat, the wind was blowing so hard that it broke our sails. Not only that (or Also or To top it all off), when we lowered the sails we realized that we had lost our satnav. We were going in the wrong direction and we didn’t know where we were! What an awful journey! Nevertheless, the violent storm calmed down very soon and the waves got smaller. The terrible storm had thrown our boat very faraway (far off course), but in the morning we could see where we were. As soon as we found our route, we thought to go back (got back on course to Barcelona(?)).
That’s all for now. Looking forward to hearing from you very soon.
Cheers
As you probably already know "We're" = "We are" and "We were". It's just my opinion, but I would write "we were" in the places where you've written "we're". I enjoyed reading your story.
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What a awful journey!
Hi John,Sorry for not writing earlier but we’ve had a lot of problems. In fact, I’m going to tell you about our adventure. Last week, we planned to go from Genova to Barcelona where we had rented a house. So we set off in the morning to try to avoid the traffic and we got the motorway to get Montecarlo on the motorway to Montecarlo (the originally wording "to get Montecarlo" doesn't make sense, I am assuming that you got on the motorway that leads to Montecarlo, and made my correction accordingly). We would have taken about two hours but we had got stuck because there was a great traffic jam. Not only that, but when we were driving along the Monaco’s narrow streets, suddenly a wheel suddenly burst and we had to stop the car. We had the wheel repaired by a tyre dealer and we restarted off our journey. Finally we arrived at the port where we had our boat. The Nnext day, we left by boat to get Barcelona. The first part of the journey was fine and we also stopped the boat (this phrasing is ok, but "moored the boat" or "anchored the boat" would be more appropriate.) in front of a beach to relax and take a bath. The following day, although weather forecast told us that it would have been was supposed to be (the suggested change makes this sentence read more naturally) good, it was cloudy but always warm. At night, when we’re we were sailing towards Nizza, the weather got worse, the worst I’ve ever seen. We’re We were in the middle of a terrible storm: it started raining, the wind blew hard and the seas became rough. Whereas we’re While we were trying to hold the boat, the wind was blowing so hard that it broke our sails. Not only that, but when we lowered the sails we realized that we had lost our satnav SATNAV (usually acronyms such as this are written in all capital letters). We were going in the wrong direction and we didn’t know where we were! What a awful journey! Nevertheless, the violent storm calmed down very soon and the waves got smaller. The terrible storm had thrown our boat very faraway far away, but in the morning we could see where we were. As soon as we found our route, we thought decided to go back.
That’s all for now. Looking forward to hearing from you very soon.
Cheers
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What a awful journey!
Hi John,sorry for not writing earlier but we’ve had a lot of problems. In fact, I’m going to tell you about our adventure. Last week, we planned to go from Genova to Barcelona where we had rented a house. So we set off in the morning to try to avoid the traffic and we got the motorway to get Montecarlo. We would have taken about two hours but we had got stuck because there was a great traffic jam. Not only, (no comma here) when we were driving along the Monaco’s narrow streets, suddenly a wheel burst and we had to stop the car. We had the wheel repaired by a tyre tire dealer and we restarted off our journey. Finally we arrived at the port where we had our boat. The next day, we left by boat to get for Barcelona. The first part of the journey was fine and we also stopped the boat in front of a beach to relax and take a bath. The following day, although the weather forecast told us that it would have been good, it was cloudy but always warm. At night, when we’re we were (we're means we are, no we were) sailing towards Nizza, the weather got worse, the worst I’ve ever seen. we’re we were in the middle of a terrible storm:. It started raining, the wind blew hard and the sea became rough. Whereas (starting a sentence with whereas sounds very weird) we’re we were trying to hold the boat, the wind was blowing so hard that it broke our sails. Not only, when we lowered the sails we realized that we had lost our satnav. We were going in the wrong direction and we didn’t know where we were! What a an awful journey! Nevertheless, the violent storm calmed down very soon and the waves got smaller. The terrible storm had thrown our boat very faraway, but in the morning we could see where we were. As soon as we found our route, we thought to go back.
That’s all for now. Looking forward to hearing from you very soon.
Cheers
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