Acknowledgements

Hi, there

Could you help me with a part of the acknowledgments for my thesis? Are there many grammatical mistakes?

I am very grateful to the professor Dr. Pereira Leite, who with extreme competence, advised me in the process of development of this thesis, not only with his insights, but also with his incentives.
A special thank you to my colleagues in the Department of Social Service for their support to and trust in the results of this work. study
I would also like to thank my parents for their patience and the encouragement given to me to conclude this Master’s program
In addition, I would like to thank Dr. George Lopes, coordinator of the São Paulo parole office, for having allowed me to visit the prison facilities...

Thank you!

1 Relative clause requires two commas.

2 Process and development similiar in meaning in this case.

3 Thank you is not hyphenated.

4 Encouragement is an abstract uncountable noun.

5 More formal and appropriate for Academic English. 

Hope it helps.