No gain No effort
When he saw coconuts at the high on trees, he wanted to drink coconut water. He thought how he could drink them for a while and thought of the way. He thought he should climb a tree, so he practiced climbing a tree for many days. After he learned it, he climbed a tree and drank coconut water. Then, some guys came to the tree and said, "Please give our the coconut water." He thought that I made an effort in order to get them, but they tried to get them without any effort. So he said that, "You guys should practice climbing a tree if you want them. No gain no effort."
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No effort, no gain
When he saw coconuts high up in the trees, he wanted to drink coconut water. He thought how he could drink them for a while and thought of a way. He thought that he should climb a tree, so he practiced climbing trees for many days. After he learned, he climbed a tree and drank coconut water.Then, some guys came to the tree and said, "Please give us some coconut water." He thought that he had made an effort in order to get them, but they tried to get them without any effort. So he said, "You guys should practice climbing a tree if you want them. No effort, no gain."
Hello Yuuichi,
A nice story with a message that can be applied in many parts of our lives. The only major change I made was to change effort and gain, you have to make the effort before you make the gain. Apart from that just a few small corrections.
Well done.
Bob
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No gain No effort (No pain, no gain)
When he saw coconuts high up in the trees, he wanted to drink coconut water. He thought about how he could drink from them for a while, and thought of the way. (you don't really need to add this, as you mention him thinking about a solution, and then the next sentence is the solution he thought of. So, saying he thought of a solution is a bit redundant.) He thought he should (I might correct it to "He decided he needed to climb a tree") climb a tree, so he practiced climbing a tree for many days. After he learned how, he climbed a tree and drank coconut water. Then, some guys came to the tree and said, "Please give us the coconut water." He thought, I made an effort in order to get them, but they tried to get them without any effort. So he said that, "You guys should practice climbing a tree if you want them. No pain, no gain."The English is very good! A bit of work on punctuation will really help you refine your writing.
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Thank you for your comment. I used "No gain, no effort" imitating "No pain, no gain."
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I concur with Bob's corrections and comment. I would just add that in American English we use a common idiomatic expression: "No pain, no gain." That would be very typical to use in a story like this instead of "no effort no gain."
Good job, and best of luck to you in your studies!
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