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Last week my father, a handsome and interesting man,went to the theater. He has a very good seat, the play was very interesting, but he didn't enjoy it. Because, a young man and a young woman were sitting behind him. They were talking loudly, my father got very angry. He could not hear a the actors, he turn around and look at the man and the woman angrily, they didn't pay any attention. In the end, he could not beat it. He turn around again. I can't hear a word! My father said angrily. It's none one of your business. The young man said rudely. This is a private conversation.
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Please help me to improve my writing skills
Last week my father, a handsome and interesting man, went to the theater. He had a very good seat, and the play was very interesting, but he didn't enjoy it. That was because a young man and a young woman were sitting behind him and were talking loudly. So my father got very angry. He could not hear the actors, and he turned around and looked at the man and the woman angrily, but they didn't pay any attention. In the end, he could not bear it. He turn around again. "I can't hear a word!", my father said angrily. "It's none one of your business", the young man said rudely, "This is a private conversation".Hi 西班牙馅饼. Well done. I would say there are two key points for improvement:
1. Be consistent about using using the past simple tense for events in the past.
2. Note how the corrected version uses linking words (and, so, but) to make the flow of the story clearer.
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