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Technology: does it deteriorate people's thinking abilities?, why? and how? Since the industrial revolution, technological inventions have become more and more vital in people's lives. Technology helps people overcome climate changes, solve complicated problems and even innovate more new technologies. Actually technology helps people advance their thinking abilities, rather than deteriorating them. I think we need first to define “thinking abilities” in order to understand the technology’s effects on them. A thinking ability has a wide range of usages. It can be social intelligence, mathematical reasoning, verbal reasoning, future prediction, informal logic, and much more. And we can use technology to develop most of these abilities; for instance in social intelligence, social media websites play an important role in connecting people from all around the world. In learning English and Spanish, I use these platforms mostly every day. Without those technologies, one would need much more time and money to learn foreign languages or even to know of other cultures. Another example in which we use technology in developing our thinking abilities is programming, which necessitates high level of reasoning and analytical thinking and at the same time depends heavily on technology. Successful programmers, developers, and designers are considered among the most intellectual, creative humans. They create new things that are used in many other fields and last for decades. The more they create and innovate using technology, the more they develop their thinking abilities. Without technology, I couldn’t sit in front of this computer writing an essay to show my analytical skills –I used technology to develop these skills-. In developing my analytical writing, I found many websites over the internet that helped me a lot. Technology helps us in carrying out a multitude of ordinary tasks, so we get much more spare time to do more complicated and advanced things. In this way, the world will continue developing. People's lives would be harder without these technological inventions. There is no doubt that older generations had some skills today's generations don't have, and the reason is that we have more machines do many things for us. However, today's generations have also developed new skills and knowledge older generations couldn't develop, simply because they neither had the time nor the technology. Examples are: 1.predicting the future weather, economic states and political reactions; 2.treating diseases that have been impossible to treat;

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Since the industrial revolution, humans have come to rely heavily on technology.  

Overcoming climate changes, solving complex problems, and even creating more new technologies are all important tasks that we expect technology to perform for us.

With all that technology does for us, one cannot help but wonder if it adversely affects our ability to think?

My opinion is that rather than lessening our thinking abilities, technology enhances them greatly.



(This is only a model.  Obviously, your own way of speaking would make this paragraph sample more authentically yours.)

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Technology: does it deteriorate people's thinking abilities?, why? and how?

Since the industrial revolution, technological inventions have become more and more vital in people's lives. Technology helps people overcome climate changes, solve complicated problems and even innovate more new technologies. Actually technology helps people advance their thinking abilities, rather than deteriorating them.
I think we need first to define “thinking abilities” in order to understand the technology’s effects on them. A thinking ability has a wide range of usages. It can be social intelligence, mathematical reasoning, verbal reasoning, future prediction, informal logic, and much more. And we can use technology to develop most of these abilities. For instance, we can develop our social intelligence using social media websites which play an important role in  connecting people from all around the world. In order to learn English and Spanish, I use these platforms daily. Without those technologies, one would need much more time and money to learn foreign languages or even to know of other cultures.
Another example in which we use technology in developing our thinking abilities is programming, which necessitates high level of reasoning and analytical thinking and at the same time depends heavily on technology. Successful programmers, developers, and designers are considered among the most intellectual, creative humans. They create new things that are used in many other fields and last for decades. The more they create and innovate using technology, the more they develop their thinking abilities.
Without technology, I couldn’t sit in front of this computer writing an essay to show my analytical skills –I used technology to develop these skills-. In developing my analytical writing, I found many websites over the internet that helped me a lot.
Technology helps us in carrying out a multitude of ordinary tasks, so we get much more spare time to do more complicated and advanced things. In this way, the world will continue developing. People's lives would be harder without these technological inventions. There is no doubt that older generations had some skills today's generations don't have, and the reason is that we have more machines do many things for us. However, today's generations have also developed new skills and knowledge older generations couldn't develop, simply because they neither had the time nor the technology. Examples are:
1.predicting the future weather, economic states and political reactions;
2.treating diseases that have been impossible to treat;


* Consider using connectives like Consequently, in addition, therefore, to improve the flow of your writing. Also, this piece needs a conclusion paragraph to draw all your arguments together at the end.

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Is this an essay for a university English course? Or for a graduate program application? It's always good to know who is writing what, for whom, and for what purpose. That helps one decide what style or word choice works best. My feeling is that you have written a piece here that is an amazing rough draft. You have a lot to say, and you have made a wonderful start. But the task of polishing this essay is a big one. I suggest that you focus hard on a couple of sentences at a time to make them as possible. I also would like to remind you that as an Arabic-speaker you have a tendency to connect three, four, and even five sentences into incredibly long ones. If you could break up a few of those long sentences into smaller ones, your work would be much clearer and more fun to read. To clean up this essay why not start with the introductory paragraph. It's a good place to try and grab the reader's interest.
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Please, in your correction, consider everything, even the organization, the style and word choice... Thanks in advance.
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3.measuring humans’ abilities; and 4.producing at large scale levels by the minimum possible cost. Someone might argue that technology deteriorates people’s thinking abilities and an example of that is the use of calculators; the more people depend on calculators, the more their mathematical skills are diminished. In fact, technology’s favorable and unfavorable effects on thinking abilities highly depend on how someone uses it. A person might harm his thinking ability using calculators needlessly; another can advance his knowledge and discover new mathematical information using the same method, calculators. Calculators were invented to perform complicated calculations in less time. But if it happened and a student used it in simple summations or subtractions, then we cannot blame calculators; we should actually blame the student’s wrong attitude. During many decades technology helped in advancing people’s lives and sharpening their thinking abilities. Some people might behave wrongfully in using technology, but that couldn’t be attributed to it. The degree of the usefulness of technology depends on how we use it. As a result, people should use it in a good manner, so that they maximize its benefits and minimize its harm.

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