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Online shopping Online shopping is getting more and more common in the world. There are many websites and companies on online shopping. Online shopping market is a big market. So, many companies create websites and phone applications to sell their products on online platform. One reason of online shopping is getting more common is that it’s easier than going to shopping center. Food, clothes, devices and everything you want are in the web and you can buy them from your home with your fingers only. I think it will get more common in the future. As I said it is easy to buy anything. Generally you can find what you want with lower cost than shopping center. There is a big range also. For example phones. You can look in the internet for every brand, every colour, every version or every model. It’s a big advantage. You can read comment of who bought same thing before you also. Another advantage about it is that you can buy anything from the farthest place in the world. For instance you live in USA. USA is very far to China but it’s not a problem. Open the internet, search for what you want and order it even it’s origin is China or Japanese. However, everything is not fine about online shopping. As expected there are many disadvantages of online shopping. First one is the risk of tricking. There are many people who has welched. You have to enter your credit card number and your password to buy anyting and if someone can steal your data it will be a big trouble for you. Sometimes tricking occurs with different way. You might be heard or watched someone who ordered an expensive things and senden to him toy or cucumber. It seems funny but it’s really hard situation for who experience it. Another disadvantage is that you don’t have a chance to try what you buy. Whether it will fit on you or not is not certain. İt’s a risk also. Many companies give you refund quarantee but it is more diffucult to return anything on internet than stores.

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However, everything is not fine about with online shopping. As expected, there are many disadvantages of online shopping. First one is the risk of tricking. There are many people who has welchedhave had their data stolen. You have to enter your credit card number and your password to buy anything and if someone can steal your data, it will be a big trouble problem for you. Sometimes tricking occurs with different ways. You might be heard or watched by someone who ordered orders an expensive things thing and instead, sends senden to him a toy or cucumber. You might be watched by someone who sees you buy an expensive thing, but then he sends you a toy or cucumber instead. It seems funny but it’s a really hard situation for whomever experiences it. Another disadvantage is that you don’t have a chance to try what you buy. Whether it will fit on you or not is not certainuncertain. It’s a risk also. Many companies give you a refund guarantee, but it is more diffucult to return anything on the internet than in stores.

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This is a very creative writing submission and you express your ideas clearly. You also use good vocabulary. Good work! There are some word choice issues that can be fixed, in addition to grammar errors with articles (a/an/the) and verb tense.

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Online shopping is getting more and more common in the world. There are many websites and companies 0n who do online shopping. The online shopping market is a big market. So, many companies create websites and phone applications to sell their products on an online platform. 

One reason of online shopping is getting more common is that it’s easier than going to a shopping center. Food, clothes, devices and everything you want are in on the web and you can buy them from your home with your fingers only. I think it will get more common in the future.
As I said, it is easy to buy anything. Generally you can find what you want with a lower cost than at a shopping center. There is a big range also. For example, phones. You can look in on the internet for every brand, every colour, every version or every model. It’s a big advantage. Also, you can read comments of from people who bought the same thing before you also. Another advantage about it is that you can buy anything from the farthest places in the world. For instance, if you live in the USA. The USA is very far to from China, but it’s not a problem. Open the internet, search for what you want and order it, even if its origin is China or JapaneseJapan.
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