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As I remember it, I became a little fat a little and I regretted that I’ve rarely exercised then.
So, I had have changed my mind to walk on road more often where I had taken instead of taking a bus until that time.
From last winter, I’ve walked.
Although I have no girl friends, I felt warm in the season as if someone was always beside me cheering me up. cheers me walking together.
That’s why I was able to keep to walking.
Spring became.
I was walking being blessed by cherry blossoms on the road.
Breeze at during this the season was kind, contrary in contrast to the girls who never supporting supported me.
Wind, which always hugs me even when I feel deep loneliness, is why I can go forward anytime. (great sentence!)
On In summer, it was hot.
I was walking while soaking my shirts was getting soaked with sweat a lot.
I sometimes bought new shirts to change my soaked ones cloth, so I’d increased the number of clothes I have.
Then, I’d had an inspiration to cut the amount of my sweat by reducing my body temperature, by eating ice cream when I walk.
I was proud to solve the various problems that faced me and can that I could keep to go going forward right way.
I was unsure of your meaning in some places, so tried to correct as best I could. Overall good writing, your story has lots of character, keep it up!
Pain On My Road
I’ve gotI guess eating ice cream has caused this pain.
I went to the dentist.
This annoying fact interrupts some of my plans
I
I wrote some corrections. (In two posts as it won't fit into one post.)
Pain On My Road
I’ve got pain on teeth. My teeth hurt/ My teeth are in a lot of pain.I guess eating ice cream has caused this pain.
I went to the dentist. An assistant lady of the dentist (a dental hygienist?) laughed and said I have many cavities everywhere in my teeth. And a tooth doctor a dentist has described explained that my wisdom teeth lean the wrong direction in my gingiva, so I may have double pains twice as much pain in my mouth.
This annoying fact interrupts some my plans for the summer and has made even my head ache/ has even given me a headache.
I may have triple the pain.
As I remember it, I became a little fat and I regretted that I had rarely exercised then.
So, I had changed my mind and decided to walk where I had taken a bus before until that time.
Since last winter, I’ve walked.
Although I have no girl friends, I felt warm during the season as if someone was always cheering me on as we walked together.
That’s why I was able to keep walking.
Spring came.
I was walking feeling blessed by the cherry blossoms on the road.
The breeze was kind, contrary to the girls who never support me.
Wind, which always hugs me even when I feel deep loneliness, is why I can go forward anytime.
In summer, it was hot.
I was walking while soaking my shirts with sweat a lot.
I sometimes bought new shirts to change my soaked clothes, so I increased the number of clothes I have.
Then, I’d had an inspiration to cut the amount of my sweat by reducing my body temperature, by eating ice cream when I walk.
I was proud to solve various problem I faced, and to keep moving forward.
Totally, that’s why I’ve got cavities.
Finally, I’ve found that the number of clothes has increased and one of cavities has increased too./ one of my cavaties has done the same.
And even though I go forward the right way, my wisdom teeth have definitely gone the wrong way.
A surgery to pull the teeth pluck it off will be soon./ I'll have the teeth pulled soon in a surgery.
It will be the very time I will feel such huge pain/ It will be the most pain I've ever felt, but I will enjoy it.
I have no thing to be afraid of. I have the best friend on my road.
I’m sure wind always cheers me even in operating room.
I hope the surgery goes well!
This was very beautifully written; let me know if you have questions about my corrections.
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