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King of Glory Recently, there is a big hot trend on a mobile game which named "King of Glory". It seems to be a fashion trend.From children to adults,eveyone holds a mobile phone with playing the "King of Glory "in full swing.All of students and brothers and sisters around me are playing the game.Most of them are aiming for a more ranking,such as "silver","gold","diamond" and so on.I am very curious about the power of the game.So I have a try,too.I dowloaded the game in and started to play it.At the beginning,I found it is very interesting.However,after a few days,I removed the game at one moment.Why?In case of being indulged in it.Certainly, it can bring on a sense of winning of people.And many games are all like this indeed.Once people raised the sense of success,they will become more interesting in the game and even be crazy.All the reason is owing to that we eager to win and be the number one.Isn't that?But indulged in games is really harmful to our study or work,and even in heath.So anyway,wo have to control the games a good time.All right?

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King of Glory

Recently, there is a big hot trend on a mobile game named "King of Glory". It seems to be a fashion trend. From children to adults, eveyone holds a mobile phone while playing the "King of Glory" in full swing. All of the students and brothers and sisters around me are playing the game. Most of them are aiming for a higher ranking, such as "silver", "gold", "diamond", and so on. I am very curious about the power of the game, so I had a try, too. I dowloaded the game in and started to play it. At the beginning, I found it is very interesting. However, after a few days, I removed the game at one point. Why? In case I was being addicted to it. Certainly, it can bring on a sense of winning for people. And many games are all like this, indeed. Once people have raised their sense of success, they will become more interested in the game and even be crazy about it. The full reason is owing our eagerness to win and be Number One. Isn't that right? But being indulged in games is really harmful to our study or work, and even our heath. So anyway, we have to control the games to have a good time. All right?

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