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Chart practice The bar chart indicates the changes in the reason for adults to study, while the pie chart compares the percentage of who should share the costs of each course. Overall, the majority of people going to study were because they had interest in certain subject and wanted to acquire qualifications. While the least purpose were for job-changing and meet people. In addition, people had widely different attitude on who need to pay for the courses, it is clear that more people think that individual should pay than those believe should pay by taxpayers. Looking at those who want to study for interest and gain qualifications accounted for the highest proportion, at around 40%, while studying for the help for current job, improve prospect of promotion, and enjoy studying only stood at 20%, which was half than the former. There were the less people who studying for changing jobs and meet people, at 12% compared with 9%. Turning to who should responsible for the cost of courses, only a quarter of people believe that it should be paid by the taxpayers, whereas most people believe that this should be paid by individuals and employers, which accounted for 40% and 35% respectively.

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Chart practice

The bar chart indicates the changes in the reason for adults to study, while the pie chart compares the percentage of who should share the costs of each course.


Those who want to study for interest and gain qualifications accounted for the highest proportion, at around 40%, while studying to help with a current job, improve promotion prospects, and for the enjoyment of studying only stood at 20%, which was half the former. There were less people who were studying to change jobs and meet people, at 12% compared with 9%.

Turning to who should responsible for the cost of courses, only a quarter of people believe that it should be paid for by the taxpayers, whereas most people believe that this should be paid for by individuals and employers, which accounted for 40% and 35% respectively.

Overall, the majority of people were going to study  because they had an interest in a certain subject and wanted to acquire qualifications. While the least common reasons were to change jobs and meet people. In addition, people had widely different attitudes on who pays for the courses, it is clear that more people think that the individual should pay rather than the taxpayer.


Hello Chang,

There are some good parts of this description but also several point which needed correction. It would help if you can provide a copy of the question as well!

The layout was quite reasonable but I think your second paragraph was much better as a summary paragraph. Please take care when using multiple phrases in a sentence, usually they need to be the same form (parallel)


Hope this helps


Bob

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