Oscar
Oscar mom, a homeless dog, lived in an abandoned house in Sanders AZ. She looked like a shepherd mix, but she was very smart dog. She knew us and our car because we fed her and appeared nearby, when we visited Sander's gas station or one dollar store . When she had puppies, she took snacks from us, but she did not eat them. Instead, she carried snacks to her puppies and fed them. She did not allow to come close to her or touch her, but she friendly wagged her tail when she saw us.
This time she had 5 puppies. We decided to take one. When we try to catch one, all puppies ran away and only one black pulpy got frozen because of fear. We took him and brought home. He was just 2-3 months old.
Now he is a big, 60 lb dog. He run the whole day long in our back yards and seems is happy with us. It is funny, that when I knock at the window glass, he looks around to see on whom he could bark and even if there is no one, he runs around and bark anyway to show that he is on duty.
It is sad that his mom disappeared. We do not see her anywhere.
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Oscar
Oscar mom, a homeless dog, lived in an abandoned house in Sanders AZ. She looked like a shepherd mix, but she was a very smart dog. She knew us and our car because we fed her and appeared nearby, when we visited Sander's gas station or one dollar store . When she had puppies, she took snacks from us, but she did not eat them. Instead, she carried the snacks to her puppies and fed them. She did not allow us to come close to her or touch her, but she always friendly wagged her tail when she saw us.This time she had 5 puppies. We decided to take one. When we try to catch one, all puppies ran away and only one black pulpy got frozen because of fear. We took him and brought him home. He was just 2-3 months old.
Now he is a big, 60 lb dog. He runs the whole day long in our back yards and he seems is happy with us. It is funny, that when I knock at the window glass, he looks around to see who it is on whom he could bark and even if there is no one, he runs around and bark anyway to show that he is on duty.
It is sad that his mom disappeared. We do not see her again. anywhere.
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Sergey,
Here are some additional corrections:
Oscar's mother, a homeless dog, . . . .
She knew us and our car because we fed her, and she appeared nearby when we visited Sander's gas station or one dollar store.
When we tried to catch one, all the puppies ran away, except for one black puppy which froze with fear. . . . He was just 2 to 3 months old.
Now he is a big, 60 lb. dog. He runs around the whole day long in our backyard, and seems to be happy with us. It is funny. When I knock on the window pane, he looks around to see on whom he could bark at, and even if there is no one there, he runs around and barks anyway to show that he is on duty.
It is sad that his mother/dam [1] disappeared. We do not see her anywhere.
[1] "Dam" usually means a дамба or плотина, but in the context of dogs and other domesticated mammals, "dam" refers to the mother.
Your post was very good, but it would be even better if you used contractions. This is because you're telling us about your pet dog, and there's no reason to write formally. For example: She took snacks from us, but didn't eat them. // Now he's a big, 60 lb. dog. // It's sad that his mother disappeared.
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