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A strong emotion - When and where the action takes place? The action took place in the south of Spain, in the coasts of Tarifa, and it occurs in the first fortnight of August. - Who was involved in the action In the action were involved my friends and I. - What key event would grab reader’s attention in your story The key event which grab reader’s attention with no doubt, was the exact moment in which my friend noticed he had zero oxygen in his oxygen bottle whereas we were diving. - What happened in the end? All occurred so quickly, my friend swam up to surface and he was about to die since just as he got the surface got anxiety and had problems to breathe. Thankfully, the monitor was so near and he aided him to up to the boat. Thank you in advance for your review.

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A strong emotion

- When and where does the action takes take place?
The action took takes place in the south of Spain, in the coasts of Tarifa, and it occurs in the first fortnight of August.

- Who was involved in the action?
In the action were involved my friends and I. My friends and I were involved in the action. Or, My friends and I took part in the action.

- What key event in your story would grab a reader’s attention? in your story
The key event which grabs  a reader’s attention, with no doubt, was is the exact moment in which my friend noticed he had zero oxygen in his oxygen bottle whereas when we were diving.

- What happened in the end?
It all occurred so quickly. My friend swam up to the surface. and He was about to die, since just as he got to the surface got he had an anxiety attack and had problems to breathe breathing. Thankfully, the monitor was so near nearby and he aided him to up to the boat.

Thank you in advance for your review.

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