A camp Our football team had a summer camp which is a competition camp. It took almost a week. We had a game everyday. It was really tough. The place the competition was held was so hot. It was one of

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A camp Our football team had a summer camp which is a competition camp. It took almost a week. We had a game everyday. It was really tough. The place the competition was held was so hot. It was one of the hottest place in Japan. We had never won in any competition for 4 years but we got a good result in this competition. It was so exciting. We proved that our hard training was not wrong. Finally the team beaten us won the first prize. It is glad but a kind of regretful cause we could have got the first prize if we had beaten the team. Anyway the result motivated us so much. We keep hardworking even from now.

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A camp

Our football team had a summer camp which is a competition camp. Our football team had organized a Summer camp where the competition has been held as well. It lasted almost for a week. We had a game everyday. It was really tough. The place the competition was held at was so hot. It was one of the hottest place in Japan. We had never won in any competition for 4 years but we got a good result in this competition. It was so exciting. We proved that our hard training was not a mistake. (or, you can also say "We proved that our hard training paid off.") Finally the team that beat us won the first prize. Team is happy about it but a bit regretf ,too cause ("cause" is informal writing, we always use "because" when formally writing.) we could have won the first prize if we had beaten the team up. Anyway the result motivated us so much. We keep hardworking even from now. We are going to work even harder from now on.

- A camp

Summer Camp

(Using an adjective is more interesting!)

- Our football team had a summer camp which is a competition camp.

Our football team had a summer camp which regularly holds competitions.

(This removes the double word "camp")

- It took almost a week. We had a game everyday. It was really tough.

It took almost a week. We had a game every day and it was really challenging!

(Having multiple bursts of short sentences removes the flow a bit. Therefore combining them into a sentence gives it more personality. Also "tough" is a good word, but "challenging" may be better for this context. Also exclamation marks are rather useful!)

- The place the competition was held was so hot. It was one of the hottest places in Japan.

- We had never won in any competition for 4 years but we got a good result in this competition.

We had not won a competition in 4 years, but we achieved a good result.

(It's okay to not repeat words, the reader will understand the context. The word achieved is quite useful, and more appropriate.)

- It was so exciting. We proved that our hard training was not wrong.

We had proved that all of our hard training had paid off.

("pay off" is a useful phrasal verb which means "to be successful")

- Finally the team beaten us won the first prize. It is glad but a kind of regretful cause we could have got the first prize if we had beaten the team.

In the end, the other team beat us and went on to win first prize. It is reasonable, but a bit regretful as we could have got the first prize, had we beaten them.

- Anyway the result motivated us so much. We keep hardworking even from now.

We still work hard, even to this day.

NOTE: Great job! I can see the you may need to revise your tenses, and that knowing more vocabulary and phrasal verbs would prove useful. If you ever need more help, don't hesitate to contact me. I give informal lessons on italki: https://www.italki.com/teacher/1455949

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