Could anyone correct my paragraphe and give me observations?
Nowadays, cars become indispensable and necessarily in our everyday life. People like travelling by their cars rather than others transports. They play a signifcant role as well as they have many and different benefits for instance: travelling by cars make us feeling free and comfortable, they can take us to whatever place we want in a short time. Moreover, you don't need to charge your card or pay to go to work, school, hospital, so it's like everything is in your hand. In addition, when you have a car, you can do anything you want: like sleeping, eating, speaking in a loud voice ..ect. To sum up, cars are one of the greatest invetions of the mankind, therefore using them in the right way is important.
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Could anyone correct my paragraphe and give me observations?
Nowadays, cars become indispensable and necessary in our everyday life. People like travelling by their cars rather than using others transports. They play a signifcant role as well as they have many and they have many different benefits. for instance: travelling by cars can make us feeling free and comfortable, they can take us to whatever place we want in a short time. Moreover, you don't need to charge your card or pay to go to work, school, hospital, so it's like everything is in your hand (not sure what you mean here?). In addition, when you have a car, you can do anything you want: like sleeping, eating, speaking in a loud voice ..ect. etc. To sum up, cars are one of the greatest invetions inventions of the mankind, therefore using them in the right way is important.1
Could anyone correct my paragraph and give me observations?
Nowadays, cars have become indispensable in our everyday life. People like travelling in their cars rather than others forms of transport. Cars play a significant role as well as they have many and different benefits, for instance: travelling by car makes us feeling free and comfortable, and they can take us to whatever place we want in a short time. Moreover, you don't need to charge your card or pay to go to work, school or hospital, so it's like everything is in your hand. In addition, when you have a car, you can do anything you want: like sleeping, eating, speaking in a loud voice ..etc. To sum up, cars are one of the greatest inventions of mankind, therefore using them in the right way is important.Almost perfect, well done!
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Could anyone correct my paragraph and give me observations?
Nowadays, cars are indispensable and necessary in everyday life. People prefer to travel by car rather than other modes of transport. They are significant because they have many and different benefits for instance: travelling by cars makes us feel free and comfortable; they can take us to any place we want. Moreover, you don't need to charge your card or pay to go to work, school, hospital, (this highlighted bit doesn't really make sense - are you referencing a charge card with which you expect the reader to be familiar?) It's like the world is within your grasp. In addition, when you have a car, you can do anything you want: like sleeping, eating, speaking in a loud voice ..ect. (this doesn't makes sense because having a car doesn't necessarily make you capable of these things ) In summary, cars are one of the greatest inventions of mankind. therefore using them in the right way is important. (The previous text does not explain why using them in the right way is important.)0
Could anyone correct my paragraphe and give me observations?
Nowadays, cars become indispensable and necessarily in our everyday life.Either:
Nowadays, cars are an indispensable and necessarily part of our everyday life. OR: Cars have become indispensable and necessarily in our everyday life.
People like travelling by their cars rather than others forms of transportation. They cars (because the subject of the sentence was "people" in the previous paragraph, "they" is ambiguous here, and you should specify that it is cars you are referring to) play a significant role (in what?.... in society?) as well as they and also have many and different benefits. For instance: travelling by cars makes us feeling free and comfortable; they can take us to whatever place we want in a short amount of time. Moreover, you don't need to charge your a fare card or pay to go to work, school, or hospital - it's like everything is in your hand. In addition, when you have a car, you can do anything you want in it, such as sleeping, eating, speaking in a loud voice, etc. In summary, cars are one of the greatest inventions of the mankind, therefore which is why using them in the right way is important. (That last sentence is strange to me, but with my corrections, it is at least grammatically okay.)
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