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in many parts of world, children have more freedom than they used to have.positive or negative? Nowadays, the world is much safer than that in the war times and the technology has been improved and upgraded to monitor children from a distance. Parents trust their kids with more independence and give them more freedom to various alternatives. I am of the opinion that it affects children more in a positive way than a negative one. Those who are against my opinion think that there still exists different crimes and children are vulnerable to those attack, deception and robbery. However, children will not always in the sight of parents. They should and have to learn how to protect themselves when alone. Some parents and tutors also allege that more freedom means less upbringing. The reason seems to be tempting to believe that those who commit crimes share the common characteristic of no parental control or education in the childhood, but it is the misinterpretation of more freedom given to adolescents. Parents may give kids more rights to choose their extracurricular lessons to cultivate their own hobbies and develop their ability to complete a mission independently. Appropriate tuition is a must and it enables children to have more freedom in the limited bound line of law and ethic. To zoom into the cases of injury and killing of adolescents, it can be concluded that those kids fall on hard times mainly because of lack of the conscience of self-protection. One in four missing children was well protected by his family before, which supports that too much protection is inappropriate. Although children may face difficulties and danger when exposed to more freedom, they grow fast and they can figure it out to avoid happening anymore. In conclusion, children should have more freedom to decide their own life path and they will benefit more than in the shelter.

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In many parts of the world, children have more freedom than they used to have. Positive or negative?

Nowadays, the world is much safer than it was during the wars and the technology has been improved and upgraded to monitor children from a distance. Parents trust their children* with more independence and give them more freedom to do various activities. I am of the opinion that it affects children more in a positive way than a negative one.
Those who are against my opinion think that various crimes still occur and children are vulnerable to those attack, deception and robbery. However, children will not always be in the sight of their parents. They should and have to learn how to protect themselves when alone. Some parents and tutors also allege that more freedom means a worse upbringing. The reason seems to be tempting to believe that those who commit crimes share the common characteristic of no parental control or education during childhood, but it is the misinterpretation of more freedom given to adolescents. Parents may give children more rights to choose their extracurricular lessons, to cultivate their own hobbies and develop their ability to complete a task independently. Appropriate tuition is a must and it enables children to have more freedom in the limited boundaries of law and ethics.
To zoom into the cases of injury and killing of adolescents, it can be concluded that those kids fall on hard times mainly because of a lack of the awareness of the need for self-protection. One in four missing children was well protected by his family before, which supports that too much protection is inappropriate. Although children may face difficulties and danger when exposed to more freedom, they grow quickly and they can figure it out how to avoid it happening anymore.
In conclusion, children should have more freedom to decide their own life path and they will benefit more than from being sheltered.


* The word 'kids' is very informal and doesn't fit with the relatively formal tone of the piece. 'Children' is better in this case.


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Edit: the orange part is one I missed earlier. Oops!

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