What do you miss when you are away from home?
When I am away from home, there are three things I miss a lot.
First, I miss my parents, because both of them are above sixty years old, and they are not in good condition. I am the only child they have, so I am always afraid of their health.
Second, I miss the delicious food my parents cook, because the taste of the food is deep in my mind. In some sense, it has been considered to be nearly a part of my body by me. If I lived without it, I would be killed definitely.
Third, I miss my best friends, because I enjoy the feeling of playing with them. We often share the happiness or the sadness with each other. If I was away from home, I would feel very lonely.
In conclusion, if I could choose, I would rather stay at home with my parents and friends.
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What do you miss when you are away from home?
When I am away from home, there are three things I miss a lot.First, I miss my parents, because both of them are above sixty years old, and they are not in good condition health #. I am the only child they have, so I am always afraid of concerned for their health. (can also say worried about their health)
Second, I miss the delicious food my parents cook, because the taste of the food is deep in always on my mind. In some sense, it has been considered to be nearly a part of my body by me. If I lived without it, I would be killed definitely. If I had to live without it, I would die. (or : I cannot live without it)
Third, I miss my best friends, because I enjoy the feeling of playing ## hanging out with them. We often share the happiness or the and sadness with each other. If I was away from home, I would feel very lonely.
In conclusion, if I could choose, I would rather stay at home with my parents and friends.
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Great work Jason, just 2 things to note :
# "Good Condition" is not normally used to describe people. You can say the table is in good condition, the house is in very bad/poor condition. For people, better to say : in good health, not in good health or in poor health.
## For adults we don't normally say "playing with them". For adults, better so say "hanging out with them", "catching up with them", "having a coffee with them", "spending time with them" etc
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