A school I had joined in I had joined in a basketball school when I was ten years old. First, the aim of the school was to teach the students who was about five to sixteen years old how to play bask

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A school I had joined in I had joined in a basketball school when I was ten years old. First, the aim of the school was to teach the students who was about five to sixteen years old how to play basketball. Second, there were many coaches at that school. They were very nice, teaching us how to cooperate with your teammates and how to improve your shooting accuracy Third, the school was full of passion. Our teachers always told us to enjoy the positive feeling while you were playing basketball and it was the key to improve your skills. In conclusion, playing basketball helps me keep healthy, builds strength and agility. Now, I am in great shape because of it. I will never give up it.

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A school that I joined

I had joined in a basketball school when I was ten years old.

First, the aim of the school was to teach the students, who was were about five to sixteen years old, how to play basketball.

Second, there were many coaches at that school. They were very nice, teaching us how to cooperate with your our teammates and how to improve your our shooting accuracy.

Third, the school was full of passion. Our teachers always told us to enjoy the positive feelings we got while you were playing basketball, and it was the key to improve improving your our skills.

In conclusion, playing basketball helps keep me healthy, while building strength and agility. Now I am in great shape because of it. I will never give it up it.

A school I had joined in

I had joined in a basketball school when I was ten years old.

First, the aim of the school was to teach the students who were about five to sixteen years old how to play basketball.

Second, there were many coaches at that school. They were very nice, teaching us how to cooperate with your teammates and how to improve your shooting accuracy

Third, the school was full of passion. Our teachers always told us to enjoy the positive feeling while you were playing basketball and it was the key to improve your skills.

In conclusion, playing basketball helps me stay healthy, build strength and agility. Now, I am in great shape because of it. I will never give it up.

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Hi again! Amazing job here! As you can see, just very few corrections! Just be careful with using WAS/WERE for your subjects. We KEEP in shape to STAY healthy. Also the correct expression is 'give it up' or alternatively you can say 'give up on it'.

Hope this helps!

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