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MY IELTS WRITING: the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984 Topic: The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984. My writing: The two charts compare the populations of France and India in term of age distribution by gender in the year of 1984. It is clear that the population of India is younger than that of France in 1984, with a noticeably larger percentage of males and females aged under 25. On the other hand, the proportion of elderly people in France is larger significantly. In India, the figures for inhabitants aged under 5 marked at nearly 14%, and the proportion of people aged 5 above to 70 was increasingly smaller. By contrast, France’s population distributed evenly in every age ranges, with around 8% between the age 0 and 40. Close to between 5% of French people were aged 65 or older, while the equivalent figures for India was only around 2%. Looking more closely at gender, it is noticeable that the figure for French women were higher than men, clearly in the age 50 upward. In detail, French women aged 70 to 75 were at about 3%, compared to under 2% of men, whereas there were no significant gender difference can be seen on the Indian chart.

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The two charts compare the populations of France and India in terms of age distribution by gender in the year of 1984. 

It is clear that Tthe population of India is was clearly younger than that of France, in 1984, with a noticeably larger percentage of males and females ages d 25 and younger under 25. On the other hand, the proportion of elderly people in France is was significantly greater  significantly. In India, the figures for inhabitants under younger than five 5 years of age was marked at nearly 14%, and the proportion of people ages d five 5 above to 70 was increasingly smaller. By contrast, France’s population showed even distribution ed evenly in every age range s, with around approximately 8% of people between the ages of infancy and 40 years ages of less than a year 0 and 40. Close to between 5% of French people were aged 65 years or older, while the equivalent figures for India was only approximately around 2%. Looking more closely at gender, the figure for French women it is was noticeably e that were higher than that for men, as can be seen clearly in the from ages 50 upward. In detail, French women between the ages d of 70 to 75 were at approximately about 3%, compared to under less than 2% of men. The chart indicating the Indian population shows whereas there were no significant gender differences can be seen on the Indian chart.


MY IELTS WRITING: the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984

Topic: The charts below compare the age structure of the populations of France and India in 1984.
My writing:
The two charts compare the populations of France and India in term of age distribution by gender in the year of 1984.
It is clear that the population of India is younger than that of France in 1984, with a noticeably larger percentage of males and females aged under 25. On the other hand, the proportion of elderly people in France is larger significantly.
In India, the figures for inhabitants aged under 5 marked at nearly 14%, and the proportion of people aged 5 above to 70 was increasingly smaller. By contrast, France’s population distributed evenly in every age ranges, with around 8% between the age 0 and 40. Close to between 5% of French people were aged 65 or older, while the equivalent figures for India was only around 2%.
Looking more closely at gender, it is noticeable that the figure for French women were higher than men, clearly in the age 50 upward. In detail, French women aged 70 to 75 were at about 3%, compared to under 2% of men, whereas there were no significant gender difference can be seen on the Indian chart.

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