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Article 10-- Morality (Please help me polish my written English, thanks!) Morality is a standard in people's mind to tell them what is right and wrong and how to behave themselves. However, most of people show their respects to morality but barely obey it in practice. They think only "JUN ZI" (one expression in Chinese), someone like gentleman can behave themselves with morality. There are some common misunderstandings that morality is to devote oneself for others's benefit, morality is bound by rules, morality is to control all your desires. First, doing things for your own good also is one kind of morality, such as a scientist who are fond of science devoting himself full-time to science, which can make progress of world's level in this area. Second, morality is freedom. Doing whatever you what to do is not a real freedom because you are controlled by your lusts. What's more, moral people still have their basic desires for beauty, money and power. Some people raise the question that what will we get if we do moral thing while others break rules or cheat others. My answer is to feel not guilty, which means you can sleep soundly and don't own anyone. The last question is how to be moral. Forcing yourself to do something which you regard as moral but you are actually unwilling to do is not moral. You must do these follow your heart. The key is to put yourself in other's position and suppose that you met the same circumstance. Then you will know what to do.

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Article 10-- Morality (Please help me polish my written English, thanks!)

Morality is a standard in people's minds to tell them what is right and wrong and how to behave themselves. However, most of people show their respects to morality but rarely obey it in practice. They think only "JUN ZI" (one expression in Chinese), someone like gentleman, can behave themselves with morality.

There are some common misunderstandings that morality is to devote oneself for others's benefit, morality is bound by rules, morality is to control all your desires. First, doing things for your own good also is one kind of morality, such as a scientist who is fond of * science devoting himself full-time to science, which can make progress of world's level worldwide in this area field. Second, morality is freedom. Doing whatever you what to do is not a real freedom because you are controlled by your lusts. What's more, moral people still have their basic desires for beauty, money and power.

Some people raise the question: that what will we get if we do moral things** while others break rules or cheat others? My answer is being able to not feel not guilty, which means you can sleep soundly and don't own(owe?) anyone.


The last question is how to be moral. Forcing yourself to do something which you regard as moral but you are actually unwilling to do is not moral. You must do these follow your heart. The key is to put yourself in others' shoes and suppose imagine that you met are in the same circumstance. Then you will know what to do.

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* "is fond of" is not very strong, so if the scientist is devoting him/herself to science, it's better to use something stronger, like "is passionate about"

** or "act/behave morally"

Good writing!! I corrected some small errors and also a few things that are just to sound more native or natural, so if you have any questions about my corrections please ask!

You clearly have a very strong foundation for writing; with a little more practice and work I think your writing can be pretty close to a native speaker's!! I actually just started teaching English writing classes on iTalki; if you want to work together more closely on your writing you could sign up for lessons. All the info is on my teaching profile. :) Keep up the good work!!

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