Eighth Day
Today, I have a firend have a fever. We went to a hospital. She illness have got better in the afternoon but the worse condition again. We feel so tension. I feel sick is a bad thing. Therefore, I hope my friend and family can be healthy. Only we have health that can to achieve dream！
Search from various English teachers...
Corrections · 8
2
Eighth Day
Today, I have a firend have a fever. We went to a hospital. She illness have got better in the afternoon but the worse condition again. We feel so tension. I feel sick is a bad thing. Therefore, I hope my friend and family can be healthy. Only we have health that can to achieve dream！My friend had a fever today. We went to the hospital. She improved during the afternoon, but her condition has become worse again. We are worried. Feeling sick is not nice, so I hope my friend and family will be healthy. We can only achieve our dreams if we are healthy.
1
Eighth Day
Today, my friend had a fever. We went to the hospital. Her illness have got better in the afternoon but then worsened condition again. We feel so nervous. I feel sickness is a bad thing. Therefore, I hope my friends and family can be healthy. We can only achieve our dreams if we are in good health!---
I hope your friend gets better soon!
Let me know if you have any questions about my corrections.
By the way, I just started teaching English writing lessons on iTalki. If you want to improve your English writing more quickly you can take a lesson with me!
1
Eighth Day
Today, I have a firend my friend have has a fever. We went to a the hospital. She Her illness have has gotten better in the afternoon but the her worse condition worsened again. We feel so tension stressed. I feel sickness is a bad thing. Therefore, I hope my friend and family can be healthy. Only if we have are healthy, that can to we achieve our dreams！Highlight: added a word or part of a word
Underline: moved a word
Strikethrough: wrong word use or tense
Practice: Conjugation of to have and to to be, If/then clauses, and past participles.
0
Good correction by Charlie ... couldnt make it better :-) Hope its not a real life story,but i bet it is ... its not only nice to be ill in China,its also VERY expensive ... unluckily
Want to progress faster?
Join this learning community and try out free exercises!
Don’t miss out on the opportunity to learn a language from the comfort of your own home. Browse our selection of experienced language tutors and enroll in your first lesson now!
Start Learning Today
