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Try Something New for 30 days I'm going to give a speech for two or three minutes in my class tomorrow. Could you correct my sentences below? It would be very helpful. I'd like to talk about my challenge for 30 days. It's meditation. One and a half month ago, my friend bought a comic 'NARUTO' and I also read them. Then I thought that I could make Chakura by myself with doing 'meditation' in the real world. Do you know what Chakura is? Chakura is a word in Naruto, it's a kind of power from our body and sometimes from nature around us. Anyway, how did I meditate? That is my challenge for 30days this time. Every single morning, I sat down at an edge of my bed and close my eyes to concentrate my sense for just only two minutes. At the beginning, sometimes I fell asleep though. Anyway, I focused on my breath through nose and I enjoyed those peaceful moments. Through the meditation, I found the cause of a difference between a good morning and a bad morning, and why I felt very sleepy sometimes in the morning. That was proportional to the amount of exercise of the previous day. 30 days has passed when I started to meditate, I couldn’t make chakura at all but I became more sensitive to my body condition than before. So now, it's easier to care my health condition and manage the time to go to bed.

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Try Something New for 30 days

I'm going to give a speech for two or three minutes in my class tomorrow.
Could you correct my sentences below? It would be very helpful.

I'd like to talk about my challenge for 30 days. It's meditation.
One and a half months ago, my friend bought a comic 'NARUTO' and I also read them. Then I thought that I could make Chakura by myself by doing 'meditation' in the real world. Do you know what Chakura is? Chakura is a word in Naruto, it's a kind of power from our body and sometimes from the nature around us. Anyway, how did I meditate? That was my challenge for 30 days this time. Every single morning, I sat down on the edge of my bed and closed my eyes to concentrate my senses for just two minutes. At the beginning, though I sometimes fell asleep. Anyway, I focused on breathing through nose and I enjoyed those peaceful moments. Through the meditation, I found the reason for the difference between a good morning and a bad morning, and why I felt very sleepy sometimes in the morning. It was proportional to the amount of exercise I had the previous day.
30 days has passed since I started to meditate, I couldn’t make Chakura at all but I became more sensitive to my body condition than before. So now, it's easier to care for my health and manage the time I go to bed.

Hello Kento,

Meditation is different things to different people, I think that by focusing your mind in this way  you are performing a type of meditation. Maybe Chakura is the power to understand your mind and  body better!

There are some problems with tenses but apart from that it was all easily understandable.


Best wishes


Bob

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