Letter :) Dear Francisco, I hope you are doing well. Here everything is fine, as you know I'm moving to London next week, so I've been a bit busy checking what things I should take with me, but the

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Letter :) Dear Francisco, I hope you are doing well. Here everything is fine, as you know I'm moving to London next week, so I've been a bit busy checking what things I should take with me, but the problem is that there are a few things which are too big, so I'm seeing if any of my friends would be interested in buying them. And I thought you might like my fantastic old TV. As you already know, it's a 40" flat screen and it's a Samsung Smart TV model, so you can watch your favourites series on Netflix. It has two USB ports, two HDMI ports, a LAN port and an amazing stereo surround sound. I'm setting off next Friday 14th so if you're interested in seeing it give me a heads-up at least on 8th or 9th. This will give me time to sell it somewhere else if you aren't interested. I'm looking forward to your prompt reply. Take care, Fernando. (I'd be very grateful if you could correct any mistakes I've made so far and give me some feedback, thanks in advance.)

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Letter :)

Dear Francisco,

I hope you are doing well.

Here Everything is fine here. As you know, I'm moving to London next week, so I've been a bit busy checking what things I should take with me. However, the problem is that there are a few things which are too bulky, so I'm asking seeing if any of my friends would be interested in buying them, and I thought you might like my fantastic old TV.

Suggestion One: I noticed that you have used commas and conjunctions to connect your ideas together in a single sentence. Grammatically, there is nothing wrong with that. However, you will notice that I added some full stops and split your long sentences into shorter ones. From a reader's perspective, this is to avoid sentences that are too long and becomes hard to follow. Having said that, you have selected your choice of conjunctions well.

I changed "big" to "bulky" as the latter word has the meaning of taking too much space and is difficult to store or move. Therefore, I feel that it is more specific to your situation. (However, there is nothing wrong with your use of "big".)

As you already know, it's a Samsung Smart TV model with a 40" flat screen and it's a Samsung Smart TV model, so you can watch your favourite (movie) series on Netflix. It has two USB ports, two HDMI ports, a LAN port and (offers) an amazing stereo surround sound.

Suggestion Two: I noticed that you wrote "favourites". As this word is an adjective, there is neither singular nor plural forms of adjectives. Therefore, it should be "favourite" if you are using British English spelling or "favorite" for American English spelling.

I'm setting off next Friday (14th) so if you're interested in seeing it, give me a heads-up at least on let me know by the 8th or 9th. This will give me time to sell it to someone somewhere else if you aren't interested.

Suggestion Three: "heads-up" is used to describe a warning or a piece of information given to someone so that they can mentally prepare for it. I am not saying that this is a wrong word -- I tend to lean towards a more formal tone. Therefore, I changed it to "let me know by". I also presume that you are selling your TV to "someone", who will take it away "somewhere else".

I'm looking forward to your prompt reply.
Take care,

Fernando.

(I'd be very grateful if you could correct any mistakes I've made so far and give me some feedback, thanks in advance.)

Hi Belmonth,

I hope my correction helps you.

Cheers,
Lance

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