Overcoming the inner fear
When I was a little child, I'm afraid of dogs. I remember that once in a Spring Festival, I paid a visit to my uncle. In the garden of his house, I saw a big black dog. It chased after me. And l ran through several parterres and ran upstairs, hidding myself in the room, then finally escaped from it, not being hurt. After this experience, l always ran away the instant l saw a dog. And the dog always chase after me and bark fiercely after me. The more scared l was, the fiercer dogs turn to be. I gradually developed a canine phobia. Then as l gradually grow up, one day somehow it occurred to me that being afraid of dogs is something so shameful. So when l saw a dog again, l no longer ran away immediately, but stood confronting it. Strangely, the dog also stopped and stood still. It barked at me, month widly opened, as if it was going to pounce on me. However in fact, it didn't move a single step towards me at all.
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Overcoming the my inner fear
When I was a little/child, I'm was afraid of dogs. I remember that once in a once during a Spring Festival, when I paid a visit to my uncle, in the garden of his house, I saw a big black dog. It chased after me and l ran through several parterres and ran upstairs, hiding myself in the room, then I'd finally escaped gotten away from it, not being hurt unscathed. After this experience, l'd always ran away the instant l saw a dog. And the dog would always chase after me and bark fiercely after at me. The more scared l was got, the fiercer the dogs turn to be became. I gradually developed a canine phobia. Then as l gradually grew up, one day somehow it occurred to me that being afraid of dogs is something so really shameful/embarrassing. So when l saw a dog again, l no longer ran away immediately, but stood there and confronted it. Strangely, the dog also stopped and stood still. It barked at me, month mouth wide opened, as if it was going to pounce on me. However in fact, it actually didn't move a single step towards me at all.* "I was a little child" isn't technically wrong but it sounds weird. Instead you could say "when I was little" or "when I was a child." Both work.
* "Once during a" sounds more natural than "once in a." You can also drop the "that."
* "Hiding myself" sounds weird. We usually just say "I hid/am hiding," since you're hiding yourself (i.e. "your whole body" on your own.)
* "Escaped" is fine but we generally use "get/got/gotten away" more in everyday speech.
* "not being hurt" sounds a little strange and we usually say "unscathed" especially when we talk about "getting away/out" of something.
* "I gradually grew up" sounds really weird. Growing up during your normal developing years (not "growing up" mentally because you act like a kid) happens on its own, not really gradually. You can just omit it.
* "Shameful" isn't wrong, but in English we heavily gravitate toward using the word "embarrassing" instead. They both mean basically the same thing. You can also say "I was ashamed [of X]" if you'd like.
* "In fact" is usually used when adding something to a sentence and in this case "actually" is more fitting, since it did something on the contrary to what you would expect.
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