thread of fate №573
Hi, Dude!
I am certain you are all right and your lady feels good too. Say hi to you maiden. If you stay, please sit. I have made engage one delicious girl. She is undescribable, therefore I decided to make her mine. Of course it was not so simple, how I had thought, but the audacity can breach either wall. How said my grandfather the fortune favours the brave.
You know how is difficult to get new acquaintance. The Tinder is able to find only casual one or two night stand therefore I had a go to wait my destine without any affairs. Moreover it is safely than to catch filthy contagion. But the life made a surprise. Quite incidentally, I loved a young doctor. Don’t ask me how I was gotten injured, only believe, it had been natural historical drama. I would tell you that adventure story later, of course if you were want.
I was lying on the surgery table, when I started to regain my control. Firstly, I saw her eyes, they were as sparkling stars in our north night sky during frozen winter. In spite of her face was hidden by medicine mask, I recognized her inner deep world. It was a love at the first sight. Her eyelashes were so long and eyebrows were so accurate, that everyone could understand that girl can do make up right.
I was absolutely naked, but I was not ashamed. She only fulfill her duties… By the way she has been fastening my wound as a perfect knitting loom.
Next week I saw her twice. She was very talkative and friendly. Her presence encouraged me more than heavy painkiller. She said to me that my leg was buried in appropriate way with all military traditions. But I became a disabled. Whom is needed I?
One day mr. President mentioned about me in his greatfull speech. I am sure you heard that speech also. He gave me a medal of honor. My love called me by the phone after that, and asked me aftter about my health. I conceived that it was not coincidence and asked her out. She weakly answered that she had had some plans for that evening but accepted my proposal at the end. How could discuss with a disabled?
Sometimes she whispered me that she has a perfect surgery friend. I saw her, she is really candy. Not of course, as my cute love is, but I think you crucially change your attitude after she will be observed by you. Please postpone your marriage and endeavor to visit me. Do that for my leg’s sake.
You crony, one leg soldier.
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I know this is kind of old, but my first correction got deleted because of italki's formatting and character limit. If you're still interested in corrections, here it is, in two parts:
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thread of fate №573
Hi, Dude!I am certain sure you are all right alright and your lady feels good too. Say hi to your maiden for me. If you stay, please sit. I have made engaged to be married one delicious girl. She is unindescribable, therefore so I decided to make her mine. Of course it was not so simple, how as simple as I had thought it would be, but the audacity can breach either wall overcome any obstacle. How said Like my grandfather said/used to say the fortune favours (the American spelling is favor, without the the brave.
You know how is difficult it is to get make a new acquaintance (a common phrase in the context of dating is "you know how difficult it is to meet someone"). The Tinder is able to find only only good for casual one or two night stands, therefore I had a go to wait to await my destiny without any affairs of my own: schemes/interference/attempts to intervene. Moreover it is safely than to you are less likely to catch/or/there is less risk of catching some filthy contagion disease (contagion can technically be used, but it's usually used in more a medical/scientific, so it just depends on what you're going for). But the life made a surprise surprised me. Quite incidentally/by chance, I loved fell in love with a young doctor. Don’t ask me how I was gotten/got injured, only just believe me when I say it had been natural historical was a true drama... -->
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Sometimes she whispered to me (If it is something she said once in the past, then: "Once she whispered to me" if it is something she says occasionally then it's "Sometimes she whispers to me") that she has a perfect surgery friend (?*). I saw her, she is really candy ("eye candy" is a very good english expression to use here). Not of course, as my cute love is, but I think you crucially change your attitude after she will be observed by you would understand is you saw her. Please postpone your marriage and endeavor to visit me. Do that for my leg’s sake.
Your crony, one leg the one-legged soldier. Crony is a noun, meaning friend; the original makes it look like an adjective alongside "one leg". If you want this formatted like the closing of a letter it would be:
"Your crony,
The one-legged soldier"
? * Is her friend a surgeon or is her friend perfect-looking because of surgery? If she looks perfect because of surgery you could say "a surgically perfect friend" or to use an English-language/American idiom, you could say "a perfect plastic friend" which comes from the term "plastic surgery" ie cosmetic/appearance surgery). There's LOTS of other wording you can play around with, these are just a couple of easier suggestions.
Detailed explanation of "one-legged" if you're interested: One-legged needs a hyphen ( - ) because it is two words that make one adjective that is separate from the words' individual meanings. Changing it to one-legged makes it an adjective that describes how many legs he has, whereas "one leg" means literally just one of the noun leg, separate from soldier, a separate noun.
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... I would will tell you that adventure/or/story later, of course if you were want.
I was lying on the surgery table for surgery, when I started to regain my control consciousness. Firstly, I saw her eyes; they were as sparkling stars in our northern night sky during frozen winter. In spite of Even though her face was hidden by medicine a surgical mask, I recognized her inner deep inner world. It was a love at the first sight. Her eyelashes were so long and eyebrows were so accurate precise, that everyone could understand see that girl can do make up right.
I was absolutely naked, but I was not ashamed. She was only fulfilling her duties… By the way she has had been fastening my wound as like a perfect knitting loom.
The next week I saw her twice. She was very talkative and friendly. Her presence encouraged me more than heavy painkillers. She said to me that my leg was buried in the appropriate way with all military traditions. But I became a was disabled now. Whom is needed I Who could need me?
One day Mr. President mentioned about me in his greatfull grateful speech. I am sure you heard that speech also. He gave me a medal of honor. My love called me by the phone after that, and asked me aftter about my health. I conceived decided that it was not coincidence and asked her out. She weakly answered that she had had some plans for that evening but accepted my proposal at the end. How Who could discuss turn down with a disabled handicap? (handicap: noun meaning disabled person; impolite to use in general, but appropriate here)
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