JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON JUL.4nd(writing about this season)
I would like someone to correct my diary entry (or to tell me the natural way of saying some thing below. But I will be glad to JUST CORRECT my entry) I was wondering if you could do that for me, please?
JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON JUL.4nd
Now, the humidity in Japan is getter higiher day by day because of in the middle of rainy season here. The country of Japan is famous for kaid of exsisting the four seasons, like spring, summer, autumn and winter. So international visitors definately enjoy seeing something of doing kind of activity, but also this country is famous for exsiting the rainy season. Above all, the rainy season of this year is kind of strange, comparing to annual year's, so telling the reason why I am feeling so, because the former of the season was really good, I mean it had continued sunny days over several days but on the other hand, the latter of the season, rather than, we are in the latter of the season now, we flequently have experienced heavy rain shower these days. Therefore, we are feeling like this now, rainy season of this year is kind of starange. But whe n we get through this strange season, we might feel kind of comfortable season, yes it will be summer! I can't wait this from now on.
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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON JUL. 4th(writing about this season)
I would like someone to correct my diary entry (or to tell me the natural way of saying some thing below. But I will be glad to JUST CORRECT my entry) I was wondering if you could do that for me, please?JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON JUL. 4th
The humidity in Japan is getting higher day by day because it is the middle of rainy season here. The country of Japan is famous for kaid of the existing four seasons, like spring, summer, autumn and winter. So international visitors definitely enjoy seeing or engaging in the seasonal activities, but this country is also famous for our rainy season. Above all, the rainy season of this year is kind of strange, compared to the past, because the seasons before were really good, I mean the weather was constantly sunny over several days. But this year we are getting a lot of heavy rain showers. This is why we feel this season is kind of strange. But when we get through this strange season, we might feel better, yes it will be summer! I can't wait.
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*My opinion of course but there are different ways to go about writing this piece. My thoughts are in red and correction places in yellow. Strikethru is a word to be removed or changed. I hope this helps.*
Now, the humidity in Japan is getter higiher higher day by day because of in it is in the middle of rainy season here. The country of Japan is famous for kaid of exsisting the *not sure what was meant here* having four seasons like spring, summer, autumn and winter.
So International visitors definitely enjoy seeing something of doing kind of activity, but also this country is famous for exsiting the rainy season. *I think this is abit better: "International visitors would definitely enjoy sight-seeing as a kind of activity but the country also is known for the rainy season." It might help to give more information on why the rainy season is famous as this seems to be whole point of this particular paragraph.
Above all, the rainy season of this year is kind of strange, comparing to annual year's, *Are you talking about this year's rainy season and comparing it to another year? Maybe something like "This year's rainy season is strange compared to other years."
I feel this way, because the previous season was really good. I mean we had many sunny days but towards the end of the season (where we are now) we flequently frequently experience heavy rain shower. So this is how we feel about this now: The rainy season of this year is kind of starange strange. When we get through this strange season, we might feel a kind of comfort. Yes it will be summer! I can't wait this!.
*Good start.. the last part here just needs a better flow of sentences describing so I just wrote it as best I could, trying to keep as close as possible to your original ideas.
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JUST A DIARY ENTRY ON JUL.4nd(writing about this season) Now, the humidity in Japan is getting higher day by day because it is in the middle of rainy season here. The country of Japan is famous for having four seasons like spring, summer, autumn and winter. International visitors would definitely enjoy seeing or engaging in the seasonal actibitiesm, but the country also is known for the rainy season. Above all, this year's rainy season is strange compared to other years. I feel this way, because the previous season was really good. I mean we had many sunny days but towards the end of the season (where we are now) frequently experience heavy rain shower. So this is how we feel about this now: the rainy season of this year is kind of strange. When we get through this strange season, we might feel a kind of comfort. Yes it will be summer! I can't wait this!
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