Elaine's notebook entry: May 18, 2011

I am not happy today! Because I have to work hard.And I am very tired. This is true.I feel tired everyday.Can you believe that?


Correction: 
I am not happy today because I have to work hard and I am very tired. (Reads better as one sentence)
This is true.
I feel tired every day. (Every day is two words)
Can you believe that?


Continued:
I will give you several "corrections" on how you could have written your note. None are definite because your meaning is clear. I will give you different ways you could have said it.


I am not happy today because I have to work. I'm very tired, I feel this way everyday. Can you believe it? 
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Today I'm not very happy because I have to work. I'm very tired. The truth is I feel tired everyday. Can you believe that? 
 
-In most cases you may want to leave the question "Can you believe that?" off. Unless you are -speaking. It seems really odd in writing unless you are using dialog.

-You can also leave "This is true" off as well, because you are already telling us a fact. But this is also something used in speaking.  

I'm unhappy today because of work and I'm tired everyday.


One More Way: 
I'm not happy today because I have to go to work. Work is so hard and I'm always tired.

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This wasn't a good correction but I hope it helps you see other ways to say what you meant.