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Childcare survey
You work in a very big office. There is a popular and cheap restaurant in the building. The boss is thinking of removing the restaurant and replacing it with a childcare facility for the working mothers in the office. You have been asked to respond to an opinion survey.

A: I think we should keep the restaurant.
B: I think we should replace the restaurant with a childcare facility.

I think it is very complicated for working mothers that need to work and they that do not have a place to put their small children. Here are a few reasons why in my opinion the restaurant should be replaced with a childcare facility.
First, if the mother is close to her children she can be less worried when she works and she can improve her job performance. In our company there are lot of women that are mothers and so, the overall results of company would be increase improve.
Secondly, although the restaurant is cheap and popular only a few peoples go there. The majority of the people from this office brings lunch from home .Thus, the restaurant is little demanded. has little demand
Finally, I consider the childcare in the future is about to a social problem. Whereas almost every woman would like to have a baby, but in the most of cases mothers and fathers would rather do not have. This situation can happens because they do not find a safe place to put their small children. In this line of thought, we would be able to have a little low birth rate. That way, I assert the childcare facility would be very welcome in the office.

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help with survey

Childcare survey
You work in a very big office. There is a popular and cheap restaurant in the building. The boss is thinking of removing the restaurant and replacing it with a childcare facility for the working mothers in the office. You have been asked to respond to an opinion survey.

A: I think we should keep the restaurant.
B: I think we should replace the restaurant with a childcare facility.

I think it is very complicated for working mothers that need to work and they do not have a place to put their small children. Here are a few reasons why in my opinion the restaurant should be replaced with a childcare facility.
First, if the mother is close to her children she can work less worried and she can improve the performance in your job. In our company there are lot of women that are mothers and so, the overall results of company would be increased.
Secondly, although the restaurant is cheap and popular only a few people go there. The majority of the people from this office bring lunch from home .Thus, the restaurant is not needed by most people.
Finally, I think that childcare in the future is going to be a social problem. Whereas almost every woman would like to have a baby, but in the most of cases mothers and fathers would rather do not have (not clear what this sentence means). This situation can happens because they can not find a safe place to put their small children. In this line of thought, we would be able to have a little birth rate. (not clear what this sentence means).  Because of this, I assert the childcare facility would be very welcome in the office.