The Cold War
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Could you help me with the correction of a paragraph about The Cold War?
The Cold War was a historical world conflict that came about during the post-war period and persisted into the early 1990s. It did not see battles between military forces, nor direct showdown.
Although the world had made it through World War II, the fallout of World War II caused the Cold War to take on striking proportions. Then there came the nuclear arms race, which sent United States and Soviet Union scrambling to build up a large nuclear weapons arsenal , which was the trigger that got the conflict going in actuality and added to the tense world political landscape at the time.
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The Cold War
The Cold War was a historical world conflict that came about during the post-war period and persisted into the early 1990s. It did not see battles between military forces, nor direct showdown.
Although the world had made it through World War II, the fallout of World War II caused the Cold War to take on striking proportions. Although it did not see a direct showdown between military forces, there was a nuclear arms race, which sent the United States and the Soviet Union scrambling to build up a large nuclear weapons arsenal. This was the trigger that actually got the conflict going in actuality, and added to the tense world political landscape at the time.
Gabriel,
Great job on this. My only real suggestions involve moving some of the clauses around, though the clauses themselves are very well-written. Also, remember to put "the" in front of countries' full names. For example, "the United States" or "the Kingdom of Spain" vs. "America" or "Spain."
Feel free to message me if you have any questions!
Jacob
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