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(Have people become too dependent on tecnolohy?)
Tecnology is an important part of our life. We use computers and other devices at work and in the home. But have we become kinda robots, which cannot live without them? I am strongly convinced that we have.
Firstly, people do the easier things through the gadgets. For example, if they need to calculate something they do not use their own brain. It makes us lazier and weaker. Secondly, people use it too much. It is difficult to imagine a modern person without a mobile phone in his hands at least for one day. Internet and social networks, such as Facebook have been substitute for a real life. Consequently, people move less, speak less and even think less.
Nevertheless, many people sure that there is much more benefit in using electric equipment. For instance, some office works can be done only by computers. Our business and our life will slow down if we return to the old ways of doing things. Moreover, most consider that we need to develop and improve conditions of our world against all odds.
Despite all advantages, I am sure that it would be better restrict our time and amount of using contemporary devices. In the past people could live without them and they were abcolutely happy. Otherwise we really become like robots in the near future.
In conclusion I would say that people should continue to develop tecnology, but do it wisely. In another way we may regret in the future.
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Have people become too dependent on tecnolohy technology?Technology is an important part of our life. We use computers and other devices at work and in the at home. But have we become kinda robots which cannot live without them? I am strongly convinced that we have.
Firstly, people do the easier things easier through the gadgets. For example, if they need to calculate something, they do not use their own brain, consequently making us lazier and weaker. Secondly, people use it too much. It is difficult to imagine a modern person without a mobile phone in his hands at least for one a day. Internet and social networks like Facebook have been substitutes for a real life. Consequently, people move less, speak less, and even think less.
Nevertheless, many people sure argue that there is much more benefit in using electric equipment. For instance, some office works work can be done only only be done by computers. Our business and our life will slow down if we return to the old ways way of doing things. Moreover, most consider that we still need to develop and improve our worldy conditions of our world against all odds.
Despite all these advantages, I am sure that it would still be better to restrict our time and amount of on using contemporary devices. In the past, people could lived without them and they were abcolutely absolutely happy. Otherwise If we don't change, we really could become like robots in the near future.
In conclusion, I would say that people should continue to develop technology, but do it wisely. In another way Otherwise we may grow regretful in the future.
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Interesting article! I liked your essay and you had great English overall! ^-^ I hope I was able to provide good critiques.
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