Write a paragraph about your childhood, what did you use to play, with whom, where? so on..

1/ "Was" is singular, were is plural. "My father was... " but "My parents were..."

2/ "Spend" is in the present ("I spend time playing..."), spent is in the past.

We used to play in my grandmother’s house every Saturday afternoon in the afternoons. It was very a lot of fun because we were just children playing Monopoly, or something like that, so we could feel as if we were adults because we had cash and proprieties properties, and we made busyness business deals with each other.

1/ You can't use "very" with "fun" though explaining why would take a day. "Great fun" is another way of saying this, though it's a rather British expression. 2/ A "propriety" is conforming to an accepted standard of behaviour; property is real estate. 3/ Busyness means the state of being busy. Business is a commercial venture. I would use "deals" rather than "business" here; you don't "make business", but you can "make a business deal".

I always have liked to play at business busyness, it was a good opportunity to improve my good-negotiator negotiation skills. After that all of us grown grew up, then everyone take his went their own way. One of them moved himself to Colombia, another stared to work, two of them disappeared. In general we don’t talk anymore any more like we used to. do,

1/ "To play at" something is again more of a British than American expression but it works well here. 2/ "Moved himself"; I'm not sure about Spanish but in Italian there is a form of verb called the "reflexive" which is similar to an expression like "moved himself". It requires a pronoun like myself, himself, etc. Although not completely wrong in English, it's usually redundant. "One of them moved to..." is all you would normally say. 3/ Similarly "used to do" is OK, but you would rarely hear a native speaker say that. I suggest splitting the sentence at that point because it was running a bit long and was becoming hard to read.

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Part 2; please read part 1 first

I'm sorry to hear that.

I recommend naming the disease as soon as you mention it because it's like bouncing from one thing (the disease) to another (the symptoms and effects) and then back to the disease. It's generally better to finish talking about one topic (the disease) then moving to the next one (its effects).

It seems to us that when you spend time with your family, friends or people who you love it isn’t a spending wasting time, it’s the best time that you keep in your mind.

I think you mean "wasting" here. It is spending time (which means that time is passing while you are doing something), but it is spending it in a good way.