Hello! I'd be grateful if you could you check my discursive essay. Thanks in advance! (Part 2)
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At the same time some people do not consider CCTV cameras as the good idea. In their point of view, it is interference in their private life. Many people are puzzled or annoyed by websites which record their every click, cell phones that pinpoint their location, cameras that track their every move. So it is natural that a large number of people feel uncomfortable being watched all the time. In addition to this, nowadays surveillance cameras are used not only by the government but also by individuals and other private firms. On top of that, these cameras can help potential criminals to find their future victims easily. Besides, there is no guarantee that it will keep track of all crimes or unwanted behaviour done in the area. For example, these cameras can sometimes be thwarted by covering them up or someone who is familiar with the property may still be able to get around the surveillance and avoid getting caught.
On balance, I think CCTV cameras have both their advantages and disadvantages. But the number of situations when they helped justice outnumbers all others. Perhaps we need to develop clearer rules about when and where surveillance should be used, which are now absent. People need to understand that there is a certain number of give and take situations and try to find a trade-off.
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Hello! I'd be grateful if you could you check my discursive essay. Thanks in advance! (Part 2)
Part 2At the same time some people do not consider CCTV cameras as a good idea. From their point of view, it is an interference in their private life. Many people are puzzled or annoyed by websites which record their every click, cell phones that pinpoint their location, cameras that track their every move. So, it is natural that a large number of people feel uncomfortable being watched all the time. In addition to this, nowadays surveillance cameras are used not only by the government but also by individuals and private firms. On top of that, these cameras can help potential criminals to find their future victims easily. Besides, there is no guarantee that it will keep track of all crimes or unwanted behaviour done in the area. For example, these cameras can sometimes be thwarted by covering them up or someone who is familiar with the property may still be able to get around the surveillance and avoid getting caught.
On balance, I think CCTV cameras have both their advantages and disadvantages. However, the number of situations when they helped justice outnumbers all others. Perhaps we need to develop clearer rules about when and where surveillance should be used, which are now absent. People need to understand that there are certain give and take situations and try to find a trade-off.
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