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Students in their seats and the teacher in front of the class, is the classical image that comes to our minds when we think of the classical school day. That image has remained the same throughout the years and there is no sign of any change in the near future. Many have raised their voices in opposition to this system; since it does not allow students to be creative; obstructing completely the creative thinking by modeling their minds according to what the teacher and consequently the government wants the children to learn.
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Students in their seats and the teacher in front of the class, is the classical image that comes to our minds when we think of the classical school day. That image has remained the same throughout the years and there is no sign of any change in the near future. Many have raised their voices in opposition to this system; since it does not allow students to be creative; obstructing completely the creative thinking by modeling their minds according to what the teacher and consequently the government wants the children to learn.Hi Bárbara. This is well written, and I only had three suggestions. First, instead of "comes to our minds", I'd suggest "comes to mind". Second, instead of the semicolons ";" replace those with commas ",". Finally, "completely obstructing" sounds more natural than "obstructing completely".
Let me know if you have any questions.
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